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Pash Cracken

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Thrawn
  • Subsectioning.
    • I'd like to take care of this, but I need a bit of help. Is subsectioning in the bio no longer allowed? Thanks in advance.
      • Sorry for taking so long to get to this, but many subsections need further subsectioning. Modern precedent is two or three paragraphs for subsections, four at the very most. Many subsections have more than five paragraphs. (See Darth Bane for examples of subsection size.) ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 02:15, 1 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Bts includes a mention of canon used improperly, and cleanup redundant information, and an image could be added.
    • I've removed the link to canon and added an image. I also removed unnecessary repetitions of "The New Jedi Order" --- was there anything else you had in mind for redundant info?
  • Needs a {{1stp}}
    • Added.
  • In-universe mention in The New Essential Chronology.ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 01:27, 12 October 2023 (UTC)
Lew
  • Needs a pronouns/gender update Lewisr (talk) 02:07, 12 October 2023 (UTC)
    • Seems like someone else already took care of this.
  • Multiple duplicate links Lewisr (talk) 02:07, 12 October 2023 (UTC)
    • I'll get to this one later this week.
      • Actually I did it now --- I think I got them all. Just let me know about the subsectioning, and this article should be in the clear. Menkooro (talk) 12:10, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
        • Got the last one Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  • BTS and apps/sources section should indicate where Cracken was first identified by name Lewisr (talk) 02:07, 12 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Just want to have it confirmed whether the first pronouns usage of all characters can be cited to the sources currently cited to? Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  • In line with the modern standards, please change the instance of slave being used in the 'Nerf to the slaughter' section to enslaved Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  • I see you currently have these in your P&T, but the stuff related to skills and abilities, and then equipment should be split off into their own sections per the layout guide Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Category:Aces would this be an applicable category? Noticing per 'By 28 ABY, Cracken was considered a starship ace' Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Category:Imperial defectors looks applicable too Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  • You'll need to provide come context for Cryle Cavv in the quote attribution field in 'Prodigal pilot' Lewisr (talk) 16:04, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • (Reviewing note) Happy to see someone saving this!
  • The wizards article used to source his birth to c. 20 BBY does not mention 20 BBY itself; it would need a date note explaining the reasoning that got to that result.
  • I do believe the sections can be further split. Modern precedent for status article prefers sections of 2-3 paragraphs length, with 4 being used sparingly. Worth taking a look at Darth Bane perhaps, one of the current FAs that's always in line with the most recent standards.
  • In "Becoming a legend," "When the base was discovered by an Imperial probe droid at some point between 0 BBY and 3 ABY,[1][13] the Empire attacked at a time when an unusually high number of important Rebel operatives were on-station."—a date note should be written to combine refs 1 and 13 here; to avoid double refs. The same should be done for the last paragraph in this section, which uses refs 13 and 14.—spookywillowwtalk 17:00, 14 October 2023 (UTC)

Comments

  • Marked for probation due to second-round objections from 14th unaddressed.—spookywillowwtalk 02:04, 14 November 2023 (UTC)

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  1. Inqvote Second round objections two months unaddressed.—spookywillowwtalk 01:02, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 01:06, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 08:07, 15 December 2023 (UTC)