Wookieepedia:Featured article reviews/Clantaani

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Clantaani

  • Requested By: UberSoldat93
  • Date Requested: 09:47, 26 March 2024 (UTC)
  • Date Archived: 07:59, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

Object

  • Eliminate page numbers from referencing, could ideally move these to an index page.
    • Done with the exception of SWECite refs, which I'm assuming are meant to keep them since it's built into the template Sanathestarr (talk) 21:12, 26 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Could the Distinctions infobox field perhap be filled out?
  • Noticing some underlinking. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:54, 26 March 2024 (UTC)
  • The top quote of the page should have additional context ie ", about the Clantaani Longo Two-Guns" or something. It's kinda hard to tell why the quote is relevant to the species given 'Clantaani' as a word isn't mentioned there.
  • Ideally, that conversation will be documented (and by default contextualized) in the 'in the galaxy' section so as to avoid unnecessary quote caption linking.
  • "The species featured two sexes, male and female."—this information isn't present in TCSWE; to stay would need some other source.
    • removed, instead added TCSWE's information about gender to Society and culture Sanathestarr (talk) 23:11, 29 June 2024 (UTC)
  • "…fight for their planet's scant resources."—their homeworld isn't mentioned by name until later down, which makes it a little confusing for readers as they might then wonder what the planet referred to is, here. The first mention of the planet's name should be moved up, even if it does need an added ref.
  • Formatting: some of the images need to be sized up, images go below quotes.
  • Missing context for Tatooine
  • Check punctation on date notes and ensure that some BBYs that don't have one, specifically for subsequent mentions of 32 BBY outside of the first one, have it.
  • "Clantaani in the galaxy" can be cleanly split in two subsections (along with the relevant quote addition needed for that).
  • Modern standard doesn't really use {{Cr}} so much anymore in prose.
  • I'm noticing a bit of underlinking throughout ie "money" --> Currency/Legends and a good copy-edit run through should solve that.
  • BtS: Two 2002 dates are being referenced, thus meaning the full dates for both are needed. The game does have a listed first full release date to pull, while the preview—which is linking to a Star Wars Gamer magazine, should state it's from the magazine and the relevant information usually in magazine BtS sentences. This should also be referenced to the preview itself since a direct-game reference can't support it.
  • Year not necessary for TCSWE in BtS, though it should ideally context it as a reference book.
  • If Sideshow Collectibles is being mentioned, this should be given a date for when the Mythos line were released.
  • Tying to above, the SW.com article is also in that same year, meaning that if both parts of the BtS stay, then it'll be needing full dates for both. Though, I'm kinda questionable on whether that last sentence (the SW.com article) is something we'd keep in BtSes in modern standard, about 90% sure we'd nick it out.
  • BtS: In the default screen format, it'd be ideal for the TCSWE sentence to be the start of a paragraph split; and also, there's room for an additional image of something relevant to the Mythos line.—spookywillowwtalk 20:56, 16 June 2024 (UTC)

Comments

  • Marked as on probation at 1 month unaddressed.—spookywillowwtalk 00:17, 26 April 2024 (UTC)

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  1. Inqvote Unaddressed for a month after second round issue.—spookywillowwtalk 00:06, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 00:12, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 07:59, 16 July 2024 (UTC)