- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Vul Isen
- Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:13, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Per above nom's comments. Read one Legacy nom, get one free. Spoilers, etc.
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Support
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 07:03, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
Grand Moff Tranner 
(Comlink) 15:11, 8 April 2009 (UTC)- —Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 15:57, 22 April 2009 (UTC) - Thefourdotelipsis 21:45, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
- Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:20, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
- Lord Hydronium 00:36, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
Object
- Tommayy:
"Thus, he was not given the Darth title awarded to the most skilled of the One Sith's warriors, for which he was looked down upon." Looked down upon by whom?- Addressed.
"In 137 ABY, Krayt initiated the Genocide of Mon Calamari, ordering all members of the Mon Calamari species on the planet Dac to be either killed or put into slave labor camps, as punishment for working against the Empire." Which empire? It hasn't been specified by this point, nor has Krayt been specified as being the Emperor. Please revise.- I wouldn't say it's directly relevant to Isen, but I changed it to "Krayt's Empire," which should cover it.
Got interrupted, more to follow.—Tommy (Nine two eight one) 17:31, 17 April 2009 (UTC)- Coolio. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:35, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
Just one more. "It did him no favors with other, more warlike Sith, unflinchingly loyal and unquestionably obedient to Darth Krayt, who believed Isen was not a true Sith." It reads like Krayt didn't consider Isen a true Sith.- Good point. Fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:49, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
- Otherwise, good work as usual.—Tommy (Nine two eight one) 13:09, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:49, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
A lot of P/T stuff is repeated from the Biography. I don't mind this so much, but the detailed descriptions of the idle conversations of the biography read a bit to PBPish, and could probably be condensed or thrown out wholesale, since you cover them quite well in the more suitable P/T section. Thefourdotelipsis 04:07, 19 April 2009 (UTC)- Cut down the detail in the bio descriptions - is that what you're looking for? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:35, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
- Yeah, just the conversations that are more applicable to the P/T. And are already in the P/T in detail. Thefourdotelipsis 22:50, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
- Sorry, I meant I'd already cut it down some. Does that look fine to you now? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:49, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
- Ah, I apologize. Yes, that's fine. Thefourdotelipsis 21:45, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
- Sorry, I meant I'd already cut it down some. Does that look fine to you now? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:49, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
- Yeah, just the conversations that are more applicable to the P/T. And are already in the P/T in detail. Thefourdotelipsis 22:50, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
- Cut down the detail in the bio descriptions - is that what you're looking for? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:35, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:36, 24 April 2009 (UTC)