Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Trymant IV

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Trymant IV

  • Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 02:46, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Trymant, my child. Writing this in a week-long binge session was hella fun.—spookywillowwtalk
  • Date Archived: 22:30, 16 December 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 4571 words (391 introduction, 3829 body, 351 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 4521 words (391 introduction, 3777 body, 353 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:THRWP:ASTWP:COMICSWP:NOVELS

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Support

Superb work on this. Would love to see more. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 15:10, 8 March 2024 (UTC) (Vote struck, reason: Per policy: Banned user -- —spookywillowwtalk 17:37, 26 May 2024 (UTC))
  1. Inqvote The Adventures comic was my first introduction to the Nihil, and for some reason I had thought for the longest time while reading the novels that the spider ship was the Gaze Electric XD OOM 224 (he/him/they) 13:58, 22 July 2024 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Lots of starting and stopping and restarting, but finally powered through. It would be amazing to see more THR planets written up! Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 04:51, 19 September 2024 (UTC)
  3. SorcererSupreme21 (talk) 03:57, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  4. Really well done article.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 16:46, 9 November 2024 (UTC)
  5. Booply (talk) 00:26, 10 November 2024 (UTC)
  6. Bonzane10 Bonzane10-Sig 09:33, 19 November 2024 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 22:30, 16 December 2024 (UTC)

Object

ThrawnChiss7
  • I'm pretty sure that only the first use of 232 BBY should be linked in the infobox. ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 02:53, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
    • Removed the other links Lewisr (talk) 02:58, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
Uber
  • If I recall correctly, the Legacy Run wasn't exactly "attacked," it was a collision planned by Ro. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:34, 25 February 2024 (UTC)
    • Slightly tweaked, does that work? Didn't need an extra cite since Timelines mentions that Ro takes credit for the Disaster Lewisr (talk) 04:04, 26 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Precedent is to note what the planet looked like from orbit (e.g. Trigalis, Chorin). UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:14, 26 February 2024 (UTC)
  • "Jedi Knight Vernestra Rwoh reviewed the files of the Trymant IV disaster. Rwoh felt that the attack in the Trymant system did not match the marauders' standard raid patterns, similar to the ones she had encountered on Wevo" This is a little confusing to follow. Are the patterns on Wevo similar to the ones on Trymant?
  • I'm noticing a lot of play-by-play and somewhat-irrelevant details throughout the article. Take, for example, the section "Homesick blues," much of it goes into detail about character interactions that 1.) do not take place on Trymant 2.) do not fall under the general scope of a planet article and 3.) don't even mention Trymant to begin with. Generally speaking, character thoughts and feelings aren't really relevant to a planet's history if they don't directly concern it to begin with. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 11:30, 26 February 2024 (UTC)
    • Gave it a decent haircut; I think most of the rest can be justified in some form though, Trymant itself is mentioned a lot narratively, and most points make the later aspects of the article seem a bit more contextualized.—spookywillowwtalk 03:55, 7 March 2024 (UTC)
  • You now have two consecutive images aligned to the same side (after "Impending doom"). I honestly think there should only be one image under "Search for safety." UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:45, 7 March 2024 (UTC)
SS21
  • Several minor edits I want to suggest:
    • Ecological effects: "[...] moving Trymant IV closer to the system's second sun than ever before." Add "ever" to emphasize the historical significance of the planet's gravitational shift, as mentioned in the section's quote.
    • Homesick blues: Minor wording changes for clarity and flow.
      • "[...] holo-images of Trymant IV from before the Emergence disaster [...]" Minor wording change for clarity.
      • "On that night, [...]" to "That night, [...]"
    • Disaster's legacy: "Weeks afterward, [...]" to "Weeks later, [...]" Change to "later" since "after" is also in the start of the previous sentence.
    • Behind the scenes: "[...] and released by IDW Publishing [...]" to "[...] and published by IDW Publishing [...]". Change to "published" to match typical wording.
    • Notes and references: Add a scrollbox? Assuming those are still in use.
      • Leaving here to note to see below for responses (incase the bot starts pinging that these are unaddressed) Lewisr (talk) 23:35, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
  • I'm not saying these are all necessary, these are just changes I would make. Really good work. SorcererSupreme21 (talk) 22:45, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
    • Thanks for your suggestions! After speaking with Spooky I implemented the changes you suggested for homesick blues, disaster's legacy, and the BtS. However, we did disagree with the ecological effects one as it would be emphasis that wasn't supported by the novel. Regarding the scroll box, per the layout guide 'Wookieepedia recommends reserving scroll boxes for reference lists to articles that employ no less than forty to fifty individual references.' So for now we felt that shouldn't be added in Lewisr (talk) 23:35, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

Comments

  • Also a sidenote that yes, the infobox is cursed. But combinably with RTCT content and the author stating it was intentional that the planet was super dead, it's safe to say that all (aboveground) brushery and trees were zapped.—spookywillowwtalk 02:50, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Continue from "Idyllic refuge." UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:34, 25 February 2024 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:30, 16 December 2024 (UTC)