Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tocoyan

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Tocoyan

  • Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 20:30, November 11, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Because it's apparently "Canonized Concept Art Week". ~ SavageBob 20:30, November 11, 2010 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote I couldn't find anything to correct! --Eyrezer 03:21, November 13, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:32, November 14, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 05:59, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
  4. 1358 (Talk) 16:09, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Made a minor adjustment to the wording in the Bts. Looks solid. Trak Nar Ramble on 03:57, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:25, December 24, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Xd1358
  • Can you mention their sentience in the B&A?
  • S&C: "…considered the Ktilac Regions to be a holy space…" Kinda nitpicky, but can you really say "a space" when referring to space as in realspace? Shouldn't it be simply "to be holy space"?
  • Since the CSWE seems to have a few facts about Tocoyans, shouldn't it be added to the sources? Or doesn't it directly mention the Tocoyans?
  • All from me. 1358 (Talk) 20:30, December 16, 2010 (UTC)
    • I've addressed your first two concerns. As for the CSWE, I'm not sure. The entry on Neb Dulo never mentions his species' name, yet it does provide that tidbit of personality about Dulo, and it does mention that he came from the desert world of Tocoya. Do you think that's worth an "Imo" template on CSWE? Thanks for the review, BTW! ~ SavageBob 00:27, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
      • If it only mentions one Tocoyan, can you say that all Tocoyans originated from Tocoya? Could you paste the relevant part of the CSWE entry here? Cheers. 1358 (Talk) 14:54, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
        • The way it worked was the CCG and the CSWE both mentioned Dulo was from Tocoya, so that reference to CSWE was simply to establish that Tocoya is a desert planet. I've added a reference to the EA to establish that the species (as opposed to Dulo alone) comes from Tocoya. How's that look? ~ SavageBob 15:12, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
          • Looks good. :) 1358 (Talk) 16:09, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
  • Biology and appearance: "Mass of wrinkles" is used twice in the same sentence. Any chance of rewording one?
  • The intro says they controlled 66 worlds, society and culture says 63 systems and history says 66 systems. Is it both worlds and systems (ie one world per system) and is it 63 or 66? Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:44, December 24, 2010 (UTC)
    • Both should be fixed. It should be 63 systems in each instance; thanks for catching that. :) ~ SavageBob 15:20, December 24, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:25, December 24, 2010 (UTC)

  • The attention to the morphology in the "B&a" section makes me wonder if I should do the same for Gand. Though, I gather that such description may mostly be to pad article length. Though, it certainly has given me something to think about. Trak Nar Ramble on 03:57, December 22, 2010 (UTC)
    • If I were to expand Gand, I would add more about their morphology, certainly. To me, it's not a tactic to pad word lengths; instead, I see such verbal descriptions as being similar to our infobox rule (you can't mention something in an infobox without also mentioning it in the prose). Just thought I'd give a bit more insight into my thought process. Thanks for the review! :) ~ SavageBob 04:19, December 22, 2010 (UTC)