Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Sunnar Jan-lo

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Sunnar Jan-lo

  • Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:19, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Easily confused with kissing a Quarren, apparently.

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Excellent! Menkooroo 00:07, October 18, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 01:26, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Very clean. Easy read. ~ SavageBob 05:58, November 12, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 08:05, November 26, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Fantastic work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:31, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:40, December 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object

I once kissed a Quarren's green tentacles
  • Can you give just a touch of context on Mon Mothma in the intro?
  • Is her first mission, the attack on the convoy, worthy of an article?
  • Can you specify that the Ars Opus and its R2 shipment are Imperial?
    • The Ars Opus actually shows as neutral in the game. The subsequent mission (in both game and guide) says the droid shipment was liberated from the Empire so I've said the R2s were Imperial without mentioning the ship. Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:32, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • You use "wing" as a synonym for wingmate, but doesn't wing usually refer to a group of starfighter squadrons?
    • It does, but the Strategy Guide uses it to refer to the position in a two-ship formation occupied by the wingmate. I've changed it to avoid confusion. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:53, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
      • If the source outright uses it, then I won't object if you change it back. :^)
  • Maybe a little context on the Death Star plans (the article doesn't say what the "Death Star" is).
  • Context on Leia Organa. Even just "rebel leader" would do it.
  • Take a look at the first sentence of p & t --- needs rewording to make sense.
  • A really fantastically-written article. It flows smoothly and does a great job of conveying all of the important information to someone who isn't familiar with the source material (namely, me). A very impressive linking job, too (I forgive you for missing kitchen :^P). Menkooroo 13:10, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Just one. The article refers twice to the ambiguous "Imperial construction project," which we of course know to be the Death Star, but the article never really outwardly reveals this is what it is, and later drops mention of the Death Star in a succeeding paragraph. Can we add some kind of brief mention somewhere in there explaining that the construction project and the Death Star are eventually learned to be one in the same? Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:22, December 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:40, December 9, 2010 (UTC)