Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Squawk

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Squawk

  • Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 03:41, October 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Ye olde guest nom for WP:TCW

(0 Inqs/3 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Fe Nite (talk) 14:42, October 3, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:51, October 5, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Menkooroo (talk) 10:03, October 24, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Jeffrey J
  • "Squawk" in the intro, Squawk (no quotes) in the bio --- I'd sofixit but I'm not sure which one you prefer/is correct.
    • I've changed the first mention in the bio to quotes, but not after that since it's been established as his name per se.
  • The word "Human" doesn't appear outside of the infobox and the categories --- yup, all of that needs to be in the main article body now. For clones, I usually recommend just calling Jango a Human to avoid redundancy.
    • A savvy choice.
  • The bio doesn't seem to say, or even hint, really, that Squawk is sent into a violent stupor by the devices. The intro explicitly states as much, but the bio only attributes the device-induced stupor to Ganch and presents Squawk as just being generally subordinate. Can you make it clear in the bio that Squawk is affected by the stupor?
    • Established in the bio.
  • Also, to confirm: is he actually affected while he's blasting the gigauns, as the intro asserts, or is he only affected afterward when he and Ganch team up against Xebec? His witty quips while he's attacking the gigauns don't seem like they're coming from someone in a stupor.
    • The comic doesn't make this all that clear TBH - I've removed the certainty from the intro.
  • Admittedly nitpicky, but I don't think the ref to the TCW novelization is necessary for Rise of the Empire era --- from what I've seen, anything during the Clone Wars can self-source itself to be in that era with really no extrapolation. Objecting because the simple ref to the novelization without an explanatory note could be confusing to readers; better to just source Act on Instinct, I think. Menkooroo (talk) 03:42, October 24, 2013 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • "During Project Instinction, an enemy initiative that attacked the neural processes of living beings, Squawk started attacking harmless gigauns, which brought him into direct and open conflict with Commander Ganch." Were these events related at all or not? If this behavior is a direct result of the project, that should probably be mentioned.
  • Do we have a year for any of these events or not?
  • The dam, the river, the valley, are any of these worthy of an article?
  • Several times, you mention that Squawk was "reprimanded"; in the military, a reprimand is usually a formal process. It seems like he's just being told to screw off, so I think you should probably put this a different way... a "rebuke", perhaps? What do you think?
  • I'd like a little more context on the gigauns in the body. You don't really say what they are.
  • "During Project Instinction, an enemy initiative that attacked the neural processes of living beings," You say this in the intro, but the stuff about Instinction's effects isn't present in the body. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:26, December 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Idle objections three weeks old. User appears to be inactive. CC7567 (talk) 04:49, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:51, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:53, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 00:10, January 12, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 21:14, January 12, 2014 (UTC)