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Shoaneb Culu
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 total)
Support
Nominated. Greyman(Paratus) 05:16, 7 July 2007 (UTC)- Looks good so far.--Goodwood 01:29, 9 July 2007 (UTC)
- Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:47, 11 July 2007 (UTC)
- Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 14:06, 13 July 2007 (UTC) - Lord Hydronium 08:51, 15 July 2007 (UTC)
- Jaina Solo(Talk) 17:31, 15 July 2007 (UTC)
Object
Her motivation for wanting to establish a Jedi academy on her homeworld is covered in more detail in the intro than the biography.- Learning to ride a war beast is only mentioned in the intro.
- "Master Vodo recognized the troubles that his young apprentice was going through, and decided to spend time with Shoaneb and show her that she could not worry about the future, but that she could only trust in the Force. After several private sessions with Master Vodo, Shoaneb began to understand what he was telling her—that she could not worry about the future, and that her expectations for her homeworld were just that." Any chance of rewording that so as not to repeat "she could not worry about the future"?
Last sentence of The First Sith War is essentially repeated in Battle of Kemplex IX. Green Tentacle (Talk) 09:56, 11 July 2007 (UTC)- I expanded the paragraph about her wanting to establish a Jedi academy on her home, fleshing it out a bit. Added the bit about her learning to ride the war beasts in the article and the P&T (which I originally meant to do :P). I reworded the sentence you mentioned about "the future". And I removed the sentence/info that was repeated in the Battle of Kemplex IX. Greyman(Paratus) 14:36, 11 July 2007 (UTC)
Comments
Approved by Inquisitorius 19:26, 15 July 2007 (UTC)