- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Satal Keto
- Nominated by: —Tommy
(There are no Jedi here) 01:44, 21 June 2008 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Brought to you by the classic 1980's version of Tommy9281. Enjoy!
(6 Inqs/2 Users/8 Total)
Support
- I think you're right; Satal and Aleema were definitely kissing cousins.--Goodwood
(Alliance Intelligence) 00:08, 30 June 2008 (UTC)
Chack Jadson (Talk) 17:23, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 15:14, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
Greyman(Talk) 14:13, 3 August 2008 (UTC)
Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:04, 13 August 2008 (UTC)- Ifindyourlackoffaithdisturbing (Oya Manda!) 20:12, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
Jaina Solo(Talk) 16:25, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:39, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the Graveyard of Chack Jadson:
Third paragraph of Battle on Onderon: "while" in consecutive sentences.- Addressed.
I think you should remove the quote from the middle of the prose. I believe it’s against policy, but I’m not sure.- Addressed.
Might want to give a little context about how he caught Jeth.- Addressed.
"...that they went, he would find them." I don’t get what you are trying to say.- Forgot a word. Addressed.
I think you're about to get your's chance." Does the quote really says your’s?- Typo, addressed.
You source some things by DLOTS # and some by just DLOTS. Please choose one method, specific issue or arc.- Another accident. I got it now, addressed.
- Source by arc, if you can, please. If you need help with issue numbers, check the issue articles, or hit up me, Acky, or Greyman. Graestan(Talk) 15:34, 30 June 2008 (UTC)
- I got it, just a mistake on my part.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 23:40, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
- I got it, just a mistake on my part.—Tommy9281
Might want to give a bit about what happened with Aleema, the Krath and Ulic in Legacy.- Addressed, I believe.
I’d add a little bit about how he more cowardly than Aleema in P&T. You’ve got something like that, just expand a little.- Addressed also, I believe.
- Cool, cool. Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:31, 30 June 2008 (UTC)
- Pleasure doing business with you, Mr. Jadson. If anything else is required, please advise.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 23:40, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
- Pleasure doing business with you, Mr. Jadson. If anything else is required, please advise.—Tommy9281
File:KrathBeginnings.jpg needs to be cropped at top.- Addressed. Recropped.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 17:55, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
- Addressed. Recropped.—Tommy9281
File:KetoCrash2.jpg, File:KetosFightJedi.jpg, and File:SatalQuestionsUlic.jpg have visible frame.- Addressed.
File:Satal'sAmulet.jpg just plain needs a rescan. Graestan(Talk) 01:08, 21 July 2008 (UTC)- If someone can grab a better scan for me, I would be appreciative. Otherwise, it'll be a few days.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 01:45, 22 July 2008 (UTC) - With assistance from JMAS, I believe this has finally been addressed.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 22:59, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
- If someone can grab a better scan for me, I would be appreciative. Otherwise, it'll be a few days.—Tommy9281
- From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
From the intro: he became the lover of Aleema, further spurning Satal's jealousy - the word "spurning" doesn't appear to fit into this sentence. Feels like it should be something like "spurring" or "inflaming".- Whoops, addressed.
First paragraph of Coruscant endeavor - is there any background information you can give as to why Satal and Aleema were the heirs to Empress Teta despite being cousins? Something on the lineage of the ruling family perhaps? Without some context, I fell that the first few sentences read a little awkwardly.- Addressed in IRC.
From the Legacy section - why did Qel-Droma trick Aleema into killing herself at Kemplex IX?- Addressed.
Do we have any information on how Sebban Keto is related to Satal other than simply being an ancestor? Satal is not mentioned to have any children or other siblings.- Addressed via IRC.
Should there be some P&T info on his military abilities? He appears to have been the military commander before Qel-Droma was granted the title of Warlord.- Addressed.
- Interesting read - these articles make me want to read TotJ in-depth. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 13:29, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
- Pleasure doing business with you (Tommy deactivates his lightsaber), Cav. Anything else, please let me know.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 15:06, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
- Pleasure doing business with you (Tommy deactivates his lightsaber), Cav. Anything else, please let me know.—Tommy9281
He's referred to as "Satal" in a lot of places where "Keto" could be used without any confusion. Change them unless it's a sentence where people might get confused between him and Aleema. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:16, 10 August 2008 (UTC)- I'm not so sure, GT. The whole article includes other Ketos, four individuals being named so in one section. Also he's referred to as "Keto" maybe twice throughout all of TOTJ. Even if I were to start calling him "Keto" at some point other than from the very beginning, it would mess up the flow of the article, not to mention causing confusion with his father, who was known simply as "Keto". It just doesn't work in this instance. Please reconsider, thanks.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 16:32, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
- His father's dead for most of it, so confusion there would be minimal. Havac's handled several dozen members of the Fel family (who apparently are opposed to contraceptives) and usually uses the surname for the person the article is about. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:25, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
- Resolved over IRC. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:04, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
- His father's dead for most of it, so confusion there would be minimal. Havac's handled several dozen members of the Fel family (who apparently are opposed to contraceptives) and usually uses the surname for the person the article is about. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:25, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
- I'm not so sure, GT. The whole article includes other Ketos, four individuals being named so in one section. Also he's referred to as "Keto" maybe twice throughout all of TOTJ. Even if I were to start calling him "Keto" at some point other than from the very beginning, it would mess up the flow of the article, not to mention causing confusion with his father, who was known simply as "Keto". It just doesn't work in this instance. Please reconsider, thanks.—Tommy9281
- Toprawa:
Infobox is not fully sourced.Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:22, 17 August 2008 (UTC)- Addressed.
"Coruscant endeavor" quote should be in Quote format.Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:26, 17 August 2008 (UTC)- Addressed.
And what exactly is the current situation? Why is the Republic fleet massing near Onderon? "informing its passengers of the current situation"Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:33, 17 August 2008 (UTC)- Addressed. Thanks for looking, Top.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 17:46, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
- The change wasn't really what I was looking for. I can gather from an orbital blockade that the planet is under siege, but why is it under siege? "The Republic fleet noticed them as well, and the captain of the Republic command ship Alliance I hailed the Krath Enchanter, informing its passengers that the planet was currently under siege" Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
- I believe this has been addressed now.—Tommy9281
(Peace is a lie) 01:28, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
- I believe this has been addressed now.—Tommy9281
- The change wasn't really what I was looking for. I can gather from an orbital blockade that the planet is under siege, but why is it under siege? "The Republic fleet noticed them as well, and the captain of the Republic command ship Alliance I hailed the Krath Enchanter, informing its passengers that the planet was currently under siege" Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
- Addressed. Thanks for looking, Top.—Tommy9281
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:39, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
- Before anyone says anything, he is referred to by first name all throughout because it couldn't be done any other way. Also, the first quote of the article is formatted that way to depict Satal listening to the news report as opposed to having a conversation with someone. —Tommy
(There are no Jedi here) 02:35, 21 June 2008 (UTC)