Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Sand demon

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Sand demon

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:35, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:57, May 13, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 19:46, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:01, May 26, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:02, June 2, 2014 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:18, June 15, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • traveled beneath the desert sands in a way that natives described as "sand swimming", gliding underneath the desert's surface like it was an ocean.: What natives? The Tuskens? All natives of Tatooine?
    • The source doesn't specify. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 21:32, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
  • And that's it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:20, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • This sentence cannot truly be sourced totally to UAA because the sand demon is not mentioned in that book. You should provide a secondary reference that provides information that similar to the lylek: "The sand demon was very similar to the lylek, a six-legged predator native to the desert world of Ryloth, though the two creatures differed in that the sand demon lacked the two thick tentacles possessed by the lylek."
  • Choose a more descriptive image caption for the "History" image. We know it's a sand demon; that tells us nothing.
  • Some context on the Shock Drum would be nice. Just saying who it belonged to, such as "the Republic Shock Drum superweapon."
  • This is just speculation, even if the game allows for both options. You should find a neutral, non-speculative way of wording this, such as just saying the Sith neutralized it: "either killed the sand demon or subdued it" Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:06, May 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • All done. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:24, May 13, 2014 (UTC)
      • I'm not sure why you removed that whole sentence in the last objection. The information still seems relevant; it just needs to be tweaked to avoid the speculation. Since we know the Sith Warrior defeated the beast in some manner, that's why I suggested just going with the word "neutralize." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:18, May 13, 2014 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Context needed on Malavai Quinn in the B&A quote caption, since that's the only place the character is mentioned.
  • Same for Hare'en in the B&I quote caption.
  • "the Raiders made cave paintings of ancient sand demons that had supposedly survived for centuries": I'm a little confused about whether the species' "centuries"-long lifespan is an accepted fact or a Tusken Raider myth. This sentence appears to present it as the latter, but its inclusion in the infobox's "lifespan" field implies that it's the former. If the latter is the case, I would recommend repeating this info in the B&A section; otherwise, the "lifespan" field should be annotated with something like (According to Tusken Raider belief). CC7567 (talk) 19:08, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
    • All three done. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:17, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
      • Actually, could you also add the alleged lifespan info to the B&A section? Even though that would mean it's being repeated, it's definitely relevant to that section. CC7567 (talk) 19:19, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
        • No problem. Added. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:24, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
          • dat linking in dat addition CC7567 (talk) 19:26, May 20, 2014 (UTC)
            • >_> You saw nothing. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:44, May 20, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 12:18, June 15, 2014 (UTC)