Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Otto

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Otto

  • Nominated by: LelalMekha (talk) 01:00, September 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "I am now the ultimate power in the universe!"

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Pre-nom reviewed on the talk page. —MJ— Comlink 01:05, September 8, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Wonder if anything will ever reveal his true canon fate. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 13:10, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote JangFett (Talk) 22:28, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
  4. 501st dogma(talk) 00:04, September 17, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:45, September 20, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote I swear, when I scrolled down the page at first, I thought I saw the description of his mustache under Skills and abilities. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:05, September 28, 2013 (UTC)
  7. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:34, October 3, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Hanzo

Just one thing: any stuff describing his uniform would actually belong in a separate "Equipment" section. That is all. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 00:36, September 12, 2013 (UTC)

Jangston
  • "He took part in the Galactic Civil War, a conflict between the Empire and the Rebel Alliance, with the rank of general" Do you mean he held the rank of general? It sounds like he took part in the GCW with someone called rank of general. :P
    • Reworded. See if it's better. And my pleeze ex-skweeze missa. My spoken really bad Basic. --LelalMekha (talk) 16:24, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm a litlte confused between the transition from "Otto was saved by Motti" to "Saved from the wrath of his superiors" in the intro. Who are the superiors and what do you mean by "wrath"? In the next clause, you mention Lok, but IIRC didn't Motto secure his relocation to Lok, per Galaxies?
    • Tried to clarify the wording. --LelalMekha (talk) 16:24, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • "Dissatisfied with his situation, General Otto later deserted" Deserted what? His Lok outpost? The Empire?
    • The Empire. Fixed. --LelalMekha (talk) 16:24, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if Galaxies had done this, but where does "On that disused wasteland" come from? I think sourcing it would be better so it won't be seen as speculation. If Galaxies did (it's currently sourced to it), then please ignore this.
    • It's now sourced to Demolition instead, because the in-game bio actually refers to Lok as disused and barren. --LelalMekha (talk) 16:24, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
  • Bio- I removed any trace of "general" following his retirement. I think this would cause less confusion. JangFett (Talk) 13:33, September 12, 2013 (UTC)
501st
  • Context on Bespin in the body.
  • Nice article. :) 501st dogma(talk) 23:39, September 16, 2013 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • Context on Palpatine in the intro and the body.
    • In fact, it was not necessary to mention him in the intro, so I just removed that mention. Gave a bit of context in the body. --LelalMekha (talk) 23:32, September 19, 2013 (UTC)
  • Also, context needed on Vader, but in the intro only.
  • "He would have lost both his career and his life at the hands of Darth Vader..." Any context on this? Would beef up that intro a bit.
    • No context here, unfortunately. --LelalMekha (talk) 23:32, September 19, 2013 (UTC)
  • Also, context on Jabba in the intro and the body.
  • "On the contest field of the Dune Sea, Otto confronted various worthy adversaries such as the bounty hunters Boba Fett and Aurra Sing, the Human smuggler named Wade Vox, the Podracer Pugwis or the Wookiee engineer Quagga." Or? Not and? What's the deal with that?
  • Also, needs more context on Leia and Lando.
  • This guy is totally awesome. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:34, September 18, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:27, October 3, 2013 (UTC)

  • Is the image of Otto embarassed the bad ending when he is brought to Vader, which may or may not be canon? If so, I think it should be reverted back, as, unlike those Bail Antilles photos, this explicitly shows a scenario that may or may not be his true outcome. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 01:41, September 15, 2013 (UTC)
  • Hi Lela, nice article. It's come a long way. Just one thing though. I noticed the source regarding the timeline. I in fact wrote that segment in the SWG article, but I think I may have actually been mistaken about the 3 ABY date being mentioned in the Witches of Dathomir themepark. I'm probably going to rewrite that section on the SWG article today to clarify things further. Just thought you should know, in case you need to reflect those changes on this article as well. StarsiderSWG (talk) 23:00, September 19, 2013 (UTC)