Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Namana

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Namana

  • Nominated by: Eyrezer 03:43, October 31, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Our first tree FA nomination.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 22:53, November 13, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 05:06, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 01:36, December 11, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:57, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Namana, doo doo do do doo... ~ SavageBob
  6. Inqvote Very nice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:40, December 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • In 4 ABY, shortly after the death of Emperor Palpatine at the Battle of Endor, the Bakurans were attacked by the Ssi-ruu species, and so sent a distress signal to the Imperial fleet at Endor. There, the message was received by the Alliance to Restore the Republic, - without mentioning explicitly that the Rebels won at Endor, and the Imperial Fleet retreated, this seems a little disjointed. I think that it needs mention of the outcome of the battle other than the death of Palpatine.
  • Nereus also ordered his Imperial forces to break their truce and turn on the Rebels. His celebration was premature, however, as Skywalker escaped, the Imperial commander Pter Thanas refused to turn on the Rebels, and together they defeated the Ssi-ruu. A little nitpicky, but isn't the order off a little? As far as I remember, the Imperial-Rebel force beat the Ssi-ruu, then Nereus broke the truce, at which point Thanas did turn on the Rebels, destroying the Flurry. Could you check the order of events and rewrite accordingly for clarity if necessary? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:34, November 3, 2010 (UTC)
    • How about now? (For both) --Eyrezer 08:12, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Is the body image of the cratsch depicting him crawling along a namana tree? If so, might we be able to somehow crop a portion of that into an image for the infobox?
    • It probably was intended to be a namana branch, but unfortunately the OS doesn't make this clear.
  • I understand what this sentence is technically trying to say, but I think there's some kind of plural noun usage issues here. Can we reword for clarity, perhaps to explain that the custard was used as part of the whole cream pie? "Other use for the fruit was in custard and cream pie, which was served at Dex's Diner"
    • Tweaked along with GT's below.
  • I don't fully understand the naming conventions myself, but I believe the article has issues of the Ssi-ruu/Ssi-ruuk wording thing.
    • Conventions conventionized.
  • None of this is inherently relevant to the namana tree itself. I realize some of this detail may be necessary to tell the overall story, but please find a way to heavily condense to reflect only the bare essentials: "His celebration was premature, however, as Skywalker escaped the Ssi-ruu, wreaking havoc on their flagship and causing the rest of the Ssi-ruu forces to flee. With victory believed to be assured, the Imperials initially turned on the Rebel forces, until Skywalker, attacking from the Ssi-ruu flagship, caused the thrusters on the Imperial flagship to short out. Crippled, the Rebels forced the immobile Imperial commander to surrender."
  • Likewise, I really don't think this detail is necessary for inclusion in this article. Mentioning the starship class itself is enough. Individual ships of the class and related battles they participate in are really extraneous to the tree itself. Maybe keep mention of the year at most: "One such ship, the Intruder, saw action during the First Corellian Insurrection of 18 ABY." Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:11, December 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • Trimmed the last two. How does it look now? --Eyrezer 10:02, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
  • Intro: "These trees were burnt down during the Yuuzhan Vong War in an attempt to hide the discovery of the allergic reaction of Vonduun crab armor pollen from bafforr trees that also grew in the garden." Is something missing in that? It doesn't seem to make sense.
  • Cultivation: "Other use for the fruit was in custard and cream pie…" That would sound better as "another use" or "a further use." Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:35, December 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • Both tweaked. --Eyrezer 10:02, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged...
  • "upon processing..." Do you mean processing by the digestive system or processing by confectioners, brewers, and the like? ~ SavageBob 22:35, December 14, 2010 (UTC)
    • It's not clear from the OS, as demonstrated by the lead quote. My guess is the latter, but I've tweaked to keep the ambiguity of the original source. --Eyrezer 10:02, December 21, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:40, December 21, 2010 (UTC)