Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/MS-133

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MS-133

• Nominated by: Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:17, July 6, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: More DarkStryder goodness. I'm back >:P

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Imperialles 14:42, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
2. Xicer9^(Combadge) 15:54, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
3. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 22:55, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:19, July 22, 2010 (UTC)
5. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:06, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
6. Ever read Congo? Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 15:09, August 1, 2010 (UTC)

Object

L'Imperialles

• Images: Remember to punctuate full sentences in captions. Yeah, yeah, I could fix this myself. Just reminding you. :P
  • Done.
• Intro: "that had hosted an alien civilization several thousand years prior"—alien is POV.
  • Technically all civilizations are by definition "alien" :P But reworded accordingly.
• Intro: "MS-133 began to experience feelings of paranoia and of being watched from the jungle" Wouldn't having a feeling of being watched from the jungle count as paranoia? If them feeling watched is significant in itself, then perhaps a rephrasing is in order—the current version of the sentence seems a little redundant to me. I could be wrong, of course.
  • You're correct; reworded.
    • Alright, in that case there's one more instance in the last paragraph of "History": "began to experience feelings of paranoia and of being watched" --Imperialles 20:53, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
    • Addressed. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:41, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
• History: "The Plaque was an inanimate sentient lifeform that fed off the life force of beings around it. Its goal was to cause the destruction of those around it" Could you rephrase one of the "around it"s?
  • Changed.
• And that's it. Well done. --Imperialles 13:58, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:42, July 9, 2010 (UTC)

Xicer

• History: "Against his standing orders, Professor Brunou transmitted a distress signal to Kal'Shebbol, requesting assistance." Against whose orders? Sarne's?
  • Yes, Sarne's orders. Clarified. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:41, July 13, 2010 (UTC)
• Could the History section be subsectioned? (A few more quotes would be welcome too). That's all I have. Xicer9^(Combadge) 22:42, July 11, 2010 (UTC)
  • Subsectioned and quotes added. Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:41, July 13, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:09, August 1, 2010 (UTC)