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Lorth Needa
- Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 22:44, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: After working on this for God-knows-how-long, I've finally decided to stop being lazy and nominate this.
(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
Per pre-nom review. Nice work. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:00, 7 August 2009 (UTC)- The Flash {talk} 02:09, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
- Well done. Darth Trayus
(Trayus Academy) 05:00, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
- --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:15, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
Noice, Tranner. CC7567 (talk) 02:14, September 7, 2009 (UTC)
-- —Harrar (Cut the comm chatter) 11:44, September 18, 2009 (UTC)
— Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:14, September 18, 2009 (UTC)
-- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:29, September 20, 2009 (UTC)
Object
There's more info to be added from the Ep III novel. In the bio, talk about his communication with Yoda during the Invisible Hands descent. In the P&T, talk about his reaction to the Battle of Coruscant and his feelings on Palpatine, Skywalker, Kenobi, and the Republic. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:06, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
- I thought I was missing something. Done. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 17:08, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
- I thought I was missing something. Done. Grand Moff Tranner
- Farlstendoiro opposing
Bio/Republic Navy Service: The first paragraph does not specify whether Needa fired against Grievous's ship when he did not surrender. Later, I see Grievous's ship had been damaged by "Republic fire", but I still doubt whether Needa attacked, relented or was bluffing all the time. If that point is know, I think it should be specified.- The ROTS novel doesn't mention if Needa's Integrity fired upon the Hand at all.
Bio/Republic Navy Service: Last paragraph. Was Needa present during Palpatine's speech or not? I think the text wants me to assume he was, but I'm still not sure.- As it was a meeting of all Republic Navy officers, it is assumed that he was there. Regardless, the info is necessary to his bio.
Bio/Failure and death: that the "cave" it had hidden in. The inverted commas do not sound too encyclopedic to me. Suggestion: that the alleged/assumed/presumed/supposed cave it had hidden in.- Done.
P&T: Following the Rebellion Era Sourcebook, Needa can speak Ryl. Needa also studied specialized courses about the Empire or something ("Knowledge: The New Order" 5; not too high as a lieutenant Dragen has a 6), and he had an important level of specialized knowledge about the Imperial Navy ("Knowledge: Imperial Navy" 6; equaled only by Piett and surpased only by moff Harsh in Gamer #6, that I know). I feel those skills should be mentioned. His other RPG stats are not notable enough to be mentioned, IMHO (Astrogate 6 is not very high for a Navy captain).- Though I hate those statistics, done.
That's all. You're in command now, Grand Moff Tranner. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:06, 24 August 2009 (UTC)- Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 12:11, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner
One minor thing: The bit about Virar seems a bit too concrete. It's not that Pedetsen believed that Lorth was a Rebel sympathizer, but that he was inventing a possible course of action for his commanding officer. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 02:40, 1 September 2009 (UTC)- Fixed. Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 11:09, 1 September 2009 (UTC)
- Fixed. Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner
Marinara: A few cases I see of mixed tense. (Check the instances of "would.") It is better to avoid the conditional tenses altogether unless talking about in-universe speculation. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:09, September 4, 2009 (UTC)- I removed some instances, but the remaining cases of "would" are necessary. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 22:21, September 4, 2009 (UTC)
- I removed some instances, but the remaining cases of "would" are necessary. Grand Moff Tranner
Comments
- Note: On the advice of Toprawa, I'm going to get a few more images. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 22:46, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
- You've got a faulty ref there at the moment. --Eyrezer 05:35, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
- Ugh. I forgot that I had something else referenced to ROTS. Thanks. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 12:13, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
- Ugh. I forgot that I had something else referenced to ROTS. Thanks. Grand Moff Tranner
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:29, September 20, 2009 (UTC)