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Lialic II
- Nominated by: Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 09:00, August 27, 2010 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Yes, it's DarkStryder. No, there are no madness-inducing plaques.
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Support
Just a touch of "Americanization" was needed on spelling and punctuation. Otherwise, very well done. I'm starting to really like the DarkStryder stuff. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:37, September 1, 2010 (UTC)- Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 20:23, September 12, 2010 (UTC) - Outstanding. Menkooroo 00:37, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:15, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:02, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
- Cylka-talk- 05:59, October 19, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Question
Commanders and crew states "As Sarne was appointed to rule the Kathol Sector in 2 BBY, Treidum was transferred to Sarne's new command." Does this mean that the Lialic II came under Sarne's command in 2 BBY?- If so, that should be mentioned in the intro.
If not, can you reword it? It makes it seem like 2 BBY is the definite date of when Treidum and the Lialic II were transferred to Sarne. If this latter option is the case, maybe remove the mention of 2 BBY, as it's what led to the confusion.Menkooroo 14:16, October 12, 2010 (UTC)- 2 BBY is the date that Treidum was transferred to Sarne's command; however, whether or not he commanded the Lialic II at the time is unknown. Nothing states when he actually took command of the ship. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 14:23, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
- Is it really relevant to the article, then? What you already have in the History section seems sufficient to be repeated in Commanders and crew without risking drifting into unrelated (and confusing to the reader) territory. Menkooroo 14:29, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
- Or maybe a rewording of the first two sentences, making the second one flow better from the first and making it clear that it's just talking about Treidum's personal history, not the history of the Lialic II. Currently, it's not that clear. Menkooroo 14:47, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
- I've rejigged the sentences a little. Try it now. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 19:05, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
- Perfect. Menkooroo 00:37, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
- I've rejigged the sentences a little. Try it now. - Cavalier One
- 2 BBY is the date that Treidum was transferred to Sarne's command; however, whether or not he commanded the Lialic II at the time is unknown. Nothing states when he actually took command of the ship. - Cavalier One
Toprawa
The first-appearance tag should be used to denote an actual Appearance list item, rather than a Source list item. It may be appropriate to have both a first-appearance and first-mention tag, however, depending on what came first.Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:03, October 14, 2010 (UTC)- Yeah, I always get this wrong. I should have learned by now. Should be correct now. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 07:56, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
- Yeah, I always get this wrong. I should have learned by now. Should be correct now. - Cavalier One
Green Tentacle
"The Lialic II is the protagonist vessel for the FarStar in several adventures…" If you're playing as the crew of the FarStar in these, wouldn't that make you the protagonist and the Lialic II the antagonist? Green Tentacle (Talk) 13:33, October 16, 2010 (UTC)- D'oh! You're absolutely right. Corrected :P - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 18:17, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
- D'oh! You're absolutely right. Corrected :P - Cavalier One
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:59, October 19, 2010 (UTC)