- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Lanu Pasiq
- Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 08:07, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Evasive Action.
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
- CC7567 (talk) 23:04, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
Grand Moff Tranner 
(Comlink) 23:46, 9 May 2009 (UTC)- Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:19, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:47, 27 May 2009 (UTC)- —Xwing328(Talk) 05:22, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
- Grunny (Talk) 06:42, 31 May 2009 (UTC)
Object
- Attack of the Clone
Any more quotes to be found?- None that are particularly interesting. It's usually just "Lanu, check this" or something. She doesn't speak much either.
"Their binders, and Vader moved to engage the entire group at once in combat." Please check this sentence.- Whoops. Fixed.
"and that he had a fellow Jedi fugitive in Zonder": needs a bit of rewording; "had" should be replaced with something more specific and less awkward.- Tweaked.
"Tremayne attempted to capture Sonta at the apartment of the Omwati couple, but he failed the in the process": please check. Also, "he failed in the process" is rather awkward wording; it's either he failed or didn't, but not "in the process".- Fixed.
"Ekria and Sonta, whose name had been identified as a cover for his true identity, Drake Lo'gaan, chose that moment to escape aboard a airspeeder." Please check this again. It's unclear whose name was identified (was it Sonta); also, do you mean "Ekria, Sonta, and Lo'gaan"?- Shifted the exposition totally.
"The chase was joined by three V-wing starfighters": bit awkward wording.- Tweaked.
- Looks good. CC7567 (talk) 19:54, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 22:31, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
Comments
- I'm a little worried that the bio section might be a bit too much about Tremayne instead of Pasiq. —Xwing328(Talk) 05:22, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 06:42, 31 May 2009 (UTC)