Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Khar Delba (second nomination)

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Khar Delba

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OOM
  • Unless it explicitly mentions Sadow owning Khar Delba, Jedi vs. Sith is not sufficient for sourcing "By 5000 BBY." An expanded date note, like the ones in the FA Simus, should be implemented instead.
    • It mentions him owning a fortress--Goodmind (talk) 11:25, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Okay, but does it mention Sadow owning the fortress on Khar Delba? OOM 224 11:36, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
        • "Kressh's rival for the title of Dark Lord of the Sith was Naga Sadow, who had a fortress on Khar Delba, but also kept a secret stronghold in a crater on Khar Delba’s moon, Khar Shian."--Goodmind (talk) 13:25, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
  • It would be worth checking The Essential Guide to Warfare since it mentions that Sadow became viceroy of Khar Shian, which the start of the "Naga Sadow's decoy" section would benefit from including.
  • IIRC, Kressh didn't want to destroy Sadow's decoy fortress per se. He wanted to destroy Sadow's fortress, but he did not realise that the one he was attacking was actually a decoy. Would be great if you could re-read the comics to confirm this. OOM 224 21:21, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Please check for duplicate links.
  • You seem to be using a semicolon as a comma here: "The citadel was badly damaged due to Ludo Kressh's bombardment of the planet in the Battle of Khar Delba; but Sadow rebuilt it and, from there, put together a fleet that went on to attack the Republic in the Great Hyperspace War." You'll want to remove the "but" from the second half of the sentence (after the semicolon, since "but" can't start a grammatically correct sentence and semicolons should be in the middle of two independent clauses) or you can replace the semicolon with a comma.
  • The bts only needs to discuss the first issue it appeared in, not the other issues or subsequent arc. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:17, 10 August 2022 (UTC)

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Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Unaddressed objections past two weeks. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:51, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote OOM 224 17:52, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:28, 26 August 2022 (UTC)