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Joralla
- Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 21:07, March 22, 2020 (UTC)
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Support
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:28, April 15, 2020 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93
(talk) 08:53, April 21, 2020 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 09:45, May 3, 2020 (UTC)
- --Editoronthewiki (talk) 03:37, September 17, 2020 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:24, September 24, 2020 (UTC)- Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 11:49, October 9, 2020 (UTC)
Tommy-Macaroni 19:41, October 18, 2020 (UTC)
Object
Anil
Is the double referencing in the demonym field of the infobox really necessary?- Well, both of the entries are equally valid, but I've went with one of them. Imperators II(Talk) 07:15, April 15, 2020 (UTC)
Does the source decapitalize the term "celsius"? Just wanted to make sure as its real-life counterpart is capitalized as far as I know.Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:44, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
- Yes, it's decapitalized. Imperators II(Talk) 07:15, April 15, 2020 (UTC)
Toprawa
Considered by whom? "The jungle planet was considered to be a paradise world"- From the source: "Joralla [...] is a tropical paradise [...]." Imperators II(Talk) 07:22, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
"Notable" according to whom or what? Does the source actually say the diversity was "notable"? "Joralla's flora and fauna displayed notable diversity"Again, considered by whom? "and were considered to be beautiful."- In reply to both of the objections above, from the source: "The flora and fauna of Joralla is remarkable for its beauty and diversity," and also "Joralla [...] is a tropical paradise filled with lush trees, wondrous flowers, and incredibly varied species of animals." Since the source presents all of the above as fact, would you prefer I simply remove the word "considered"? Imperators II(Talk) 07:22, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Responding to all three objections above and to answer your question, absolutely. Don't try to couch it at all. If the source says the planet is a "paradise" or "beautiful" or whatever, just say that outright. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Changed all of the above. Imperators II(Talk) 07:48, September 24, 2020 (UTC)
- Responding to all three objections above and to answer your question, absolutely. Don't try to couch it at all. If the source says the planet is a "paradise" or "beautiful" or whatever, just say that outright. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- In reply to both of the objections above, from the source: "The flora and fauna of Joralla is remarkable for its beauty and diversity," and also "Joralla [...] is a tropical paradise filled with lush trees, wondrous flowers, and incredibly varied species of animals." Since the source presents all of the above as fact, would you prefer I simply remove the word "considered"? Imperators II(Talk) 07:22, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
The article has alternated between "offworlder" and "off-worlder" enough that I'm forced to ask which is the correct version?- Switched to the form actually used by the source. Imperators II(Talk) 07:22, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- There is still one instance of "offworld" in the intro. This should presumably be changed as well? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Changed, thanks. Imperators II(Talk) 07:44, September 24, 2020 (UTC)
- There is still one instance of "offworld" in the intro. This should presumably be changed as well? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Switched to the form actually used by the source. Imperators II(Talk) 07:22, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
None of the RPG events provide endings? For example, was the Tikiarri attack on the offworlders fended off successfully?Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:21, September 22, 2020 (UTC)- With RPG articles, I usually try to follow the assumption that game-master players use as many of optional events and scenarios as possible in their games, and that the player-characters are as successful as possible. As a result, what's in the article is what I can say certainly happened. The source only elaborates on what happens if the Tikiarri are successful in their attack. Imperators II(Talk) 07:26, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Well, shouldn't the BTS detail any and all possible or alternative outcomes? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Added. Imperators II(Talk) 07:59, September 24, 2020 (UTC)
- Well, shouldn't the BTS detail any and all possible or alternative outcomes? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
- With RPG articles, I usually try to follow the assumption that game-master players use as many of optional events and scenarios as possible in their games, and that the player-characters are as successful as possible. As a result, what's in the article is what I can say certainly happened. The source only elaborates on what happens if the Tikiarri are successful in their attack. Imperators II(Talk) 07:26, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:41, October 18, 2020 (UTC)