Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jarael

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Jarael

(5 Inqs/4 Users/9 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Greyman(Paratus) 15:56, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
  2. Red started off good, you completed it. FA. Jediknight19bby (Jedi High Council Chambers!) 17:43, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
  3. They grow up so fast..-RedemptionRedemptionusersymbolTalk 18:49, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
  4. Redjetta 21:52, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Thefourdotelipsis 22:43, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Consider this your present, Greyman. ;-) Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 16:43, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Jaina Solo(Talk) 13:20, 11 August 2007 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:47, 11 August 2007 (UTC)
  9. Chack Jadson Talk 02:03, 12 August 2007 (UTC)

Object

  • From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • Intro: " armed with usually only her weapon of choice" There's something off with this and I wasn't sure how best to fix it.
      • Fixed.
    • Intro: "unknown species which many found interesting although she herself did not know of their origins." I'm not really sure on those last two clauses (italicized). Is there a particular significance to her elf-ears that I'm missing?
      • Fixed.
    • Where it says "and was thrown off"- was she thrown off by the voice in her head or by physically knocked off the person she was attacking? Clarify please.
      • Fixed.
    • What is an "office type world"? Clarify please.
      • Fixed.
    • What was the "one last disagreement with Zayne about?" Clarify please.
      • Fixed.
    • How can the grandmother be "ill and rested"? Clarify please.
      • Fixed.
    • Third paragraph of the prisoner section does not make much sense- does Adasca go into any more detail?
      • Fixed.
    • Reference errors.
      • Fixed.
    • Why did the Mandos think the Republic was attacking? Did Jarael have anything to do with that?
      • Fixed/expanded.
    • A little more detail on Arvan's rescue would be nice
      • Fixed/expanded.
    • Capitalization of "Masters" and "masters" should be checked throughout the article.
      • Fixed.
    • The "spells" Camper had are not explained, so the situation on Arkania doesn't make much sense.
      • Fixed/explained.
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 15:57, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
      • I'll be all over these points tonight :) Jarael and I are going to have a little chat... Greyman(Paratus) 17:21, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
  • I fixed all of these points except the expansion regarding the rescue of Arvan. Hopefully I'll be able to get that done soon. Greyman(Paratus) 03:54, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Expansion has been done on Arvan's rescue. If there are any more objections, I'll have to look at them when I get time since I'm signing off for a couple days now. Cheers, Greyman(Paratus) 15:38, 10 August 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 16:03, 15 August 2007 (UTC)

  • A project of Red's from the beginning which he and I were recently able to get to GA. I believe we've cleared the way for it's FA nomination now. Greyman(Paratus) 15:56, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
  • I suppose it's inherently obvious she's female, even though it's not sourced. ;-) Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 15:57, 9 August 2007 (UTC)