Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jak'zin

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Jak'zin

  • Nominated by: LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 13:06, 23 April 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: First FAN, please be merciful, my dear colleagues. :P
  • Date Archived: 22:13, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1666 words (236 introduction, 1394 body, 36 behind the scenes)
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Support

  1. Inqvote I kept forgetting you hadn't done a FAN.—spookywillowwtalk 01:19, 25 April 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote NAIVE SPACE TIGER WIZARD IS BEST SPACE TIGER WIZARD Imperators II(Talk) 17:16, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
    If he has orange hair skin, he's a Kilji. Please update the article accordingly. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 09:16, 3 May 2023 (UTC) (Vote struck, reason: Per policy: Blocked user -- Imperators II(Talk) 10:05, 10 May 2023 (UTC))
  3. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 20:15, 8 May 2023 (UTC)
  4. Fan26 (Talk) 01:46, 19 May 2023 (UTC)
  5. Lewisr (talk) 01:13, 6 June 2023 (UTC)
  6. TomotronSith Quad-SunSith Council 05:07, 6 June 2023 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 22:12, 9 June 2023 (UTC)

Object

Samonic
  • "Equipment" should mention Jak'zin's youngling robes. Is his lightsaber notable for a page?
    • Done, thanks. And I wouldn't say so: everything we know about it is already on this page, so it would be redundant. (I.e. it doesn't have any "unique" history.) LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 13:27, 23 April 2023 (UTC)
  • The appearances section should be in chronological order. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 13:18, 23 April 2023 (UTC)
    • It is, it's actually all a big flashback. The main story is set in 3 ABY. :P LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 13:27, 23 April 2023 (UTC)
      • Of course, comics and their weird things. :P Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 13:29, 23 April 2023 (UTC)
  • The "Trial on Corvair II and Dooku" should mention that Jinn was a Jedi Master before identifying him as such in the next section. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 21:15, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • Yoda being contextualized as Grandmaster is intro-exclusive.
  • Ref 4 can be simplified a bit: Dooku's departure is dated to 42 BBY directly via Timelines.
  • First usage of pronouns should be consistent with infobox referencing.
  • "…Count of Serenno, a planet in the Outer Rim Territories…" I feel like this could be fiddled with so the sentence somehow introduces a link to Serenno, since it's saying "a planet…" as context.
  • Going to be a pain here and say some of the context refs can be merged. Did some looking around, and Ultimate Star Wars, New Edition will cover ref 6, 8 (it does use disillusioned), and 10. Ref 12 can be turned into a direct Timelines ref to merge it with ref 1.
  • More of a review note than an actual objection, but it might be advisable to swap the TFA beginner game ref for {{SWTimelinesMap}} in the interest of it being an onsite, more accessible/recent source, but not technically an objection.—spookywillowwtalk 04:16, 24 April 2023 (UTC)
    • All done, thank you :) LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 13:14, 24 April 2023 (UTC)
Uber
  • "The count subsequently offered to help Jak'zin with his mission, naming as the reason his supposed desire to help make a difference." Something about this doesn't read right for me. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:10, 6 May 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:12, 9 June 2023 (UTC)