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Gir Kybo Ren-Cha

  • Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:13, August 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: No one escapes the wrath of Kybo Ren! Except Jann Tosh. And C-3PO. And R2-D2…

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Plagueis327 (talk) 21:10, August 18, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:16, September 18, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Arrgh! ~SavageBOB sig 22:06, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:33, October 8, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 23:06, October 11, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 20:20, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 20:30, October 22, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • After contacting Obah aboard the Dianoga to ensure that his crew were not being followed, Ren destroyed left Meade and R2-D2 tied up in vines and set off to to find Tosh, Gerin and C-3PO. - I think there's a missing word or two after "destroyed". - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:27, October 4, 2012 (UTC)
    • Destroyed was left from a bit I cut. Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:45, October 4, 2012 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • "which the pirate captain planned to use in a raid on Tammuz-an itself." Does the which here refer back to the star destroyer or the repair dock?
  • In the lead, it's probably worth mentioning what Mon Julpa was the king of.
  • Context for Jann Tosh upon first mention?
  • The phrase "left them for dead" strikes me as odd when talking about droids. Not sure though. Maybe another phrase? Or maybe not. Let me think about it. :)
  • The first paragraph of "Ren's revenge" describes a fight in much greater detail than anything in the rest of the article. Maybe tone it down a bit to just get at the gist of what happened and the result, rather than recounting each blow and counter blow?
  • Might be worth adding a short "in 15 BBY" or "during the early years of the Galactic Empire" to the description of Ren's appearance in P&T, since he presumably had more hair at some point in his youth.
  • "he could speak the language of his crew..." Do they all speak the same language? Or should this be "languages"?
    • One language which he only uses once. Don't know if they all speak it. Reworded. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:49, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
  • Maybe add the original airdates for the episodes he was in (or at least the year). That's it. Very nice job, as always, GT. ~SavageBOB sig 15:21, October 7, 2012 (UTC)
Kybo
  • Is Pirates of Tarnoonga the canonical name for his organization? Our article on it treats it as such; if so, can we get an explicit namedrop in this article?
    • As far as I'm aware that just comes from the episode title. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:34, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
  • The skirmish at the end of The Revenge of Kybo Ren seems article-worthy --- objecting to it since redlinking it would give the intro a redlink.
    • The skirmish part lasts about 50 seconds. How about wrapping the whole thing into something like Rescue of Gerin? Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:50, October 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Just to confirm: Is there no source confirming that the IG-88 in the episode is IG-88B? If not, I'll change the various articles that claim it's him.
    • The New Essential Guide to Characters! Changed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:34, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
  • "he was taken unawares by Meade, who had escaped from Obah and caught him in a net." This sentence reads as if Obah is caught in the net, but the following one implies that it's Ren. Can you clarify?
  • Do we know what kind of torpedoes the droid are loading? It currently links to a disambig. I had it in mind that they were proton torpedoes when I was writing C-3PO and R2-D2 two years ago, but I can't remember why...
    • We do not. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:34, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
      • I've pipelinked it to missile to avoid linking to a disambig. Menkooroo (talk) 00:05, October 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Should warrior-chieftain be hyphenated? Bio does but intro doesn't. Menkooroo (talk) 11:42, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Could you clarify what's going on with A Guide to the Star Wars Universe in the Sources list? It states that he was mentioned as "Kybo Ren" but was also identified by his full name. It seems that if the latter is the case, only {{1stID}} should be listed, not the other note.
    • The entry is under Kybo Ren but it gives his full name in the text. Same goes for the Third Edition, SWE and CSWE. I've just got rid of the entry names, since he'll be mentioned in other entries anyway. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:28, October 22, 2012 (UTC)
  • Great work. CC7567 (talk) 20:09, October 22, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:30, October 22, 2012 (UTC)