Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Generis/Legends

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Generis

• Nominated by: --Eyrezer 00:45, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: A generic planet article

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. -- —Harrar ^{(Cut the comm chatter)} 10:42, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 05:37, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
3. ~ SavageBob 13:55, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 05:32, September 13, 2009 (UTC)
5. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 23:43, September 13, 2009 (UTC)
6. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 05:22, November 11, 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. A few trifles
   • Intro: "Generis became a strategic location for the Alliance, coordinating its forces throughout the Atrivis sector." — this reads as though Generis is coordinating the Alliance forces, could you reword this a litte/add what's necessary?
     • Done
   • Locations: "Ruins of Rakatan temples dotted the Generis jungle, of a distinctly alien design" — it seems a little strange to state that the temples were made by the (alien) Rakata and that the temples were of a "distinctly alien design". Is this a throwback to the pre-Atlas article's info or do you want to keep this in?
     • A combination, really. The description is from pre-Atlas sources, and as it is the only indicator of their design, I'd like to keep it. I think it does add something, although I've added the word exotic to convey their alien-ness.
       • Okay cool!
   • This is just a great article, Ey; I really enjoyed reading it. Interesting that they tied in the ruins to the Rakata in the Atlas. - —Harrar ^{(Cut the comm chatter)} 11:25, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review and the words, Harrar. From what I can tell, they gave Rakatan origins to temples on other worlds too, such as Hijarna and Xo, which is a really nice bit of continuity. --Eyrezer 00:46, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD:
   • "Generis was a planet of stunning natural beauty located in the Generis system" A bit POVish.
     • That's pretty much verbatim from The Thrawn Trilogy Sourcebook
   • The lead quote and the quote for the New Republic section are the same.
     • Changed lead quote.
   • Quotes for Military personnel or Locations?
     • Added some. --Eyrezer 06:23, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
   • Good work. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 02:47, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
3. Prepare to be savaged...
   • My only quibble is that the ambiguity between "Generis system" and "Atrivis system" is not spelled out a bit more in the infobox and lead section. It makes it a bit jarring to see "Generis system" used in the lead, but "Atrivis system" used in the infobox. Could you change it to something that indicates both names are valid? "Atrivis sytem/Generis system" maybe, or "Atrivis system (a.k.a. Generis system", for example? Otherwise, this is an exemplary planet article. Good work! ~ SavageBob 21:32, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review. I've added the alternate name to the infobox and also changed any occurrences of Atrivis system in the body to Generis system. --Eyrezer 07:23, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
       • Just out of curiosity, what system name does the Essential Atlas place it in? ~ SavageBob 13:56, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
         • Generis in the Appendix, as well as on a couple of maps. --Eyrezer 03:04, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
4. Are you sure it was the capture of Coruscant in 6 ABY, not the Liberation of Coruscant (Galactic Civil War) in 7 ABY? If you are, please link the one you're referring to. CC7567 ^(talk)
   • Good spotting, CC. I am not sure what happened there. Fixed up now. --Eyrezer 03:14, September 13, 2009 (UTC)
5. From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
   • Only one thing, which really has nothing to do with Generis: "Pash Cracken commanded the Cracken Flight Group, a crack unit of RZ-1 A-wing interceptors that had followed him when he defected from the Empire soon after graduating from the Imperial Naval Academy." - this implies the unit used A-wings in the Empire before their defection.
     • Clarified. Good spotting. --Eyrezer 23:41, September 13, 2009 (UTC)
   • Great job. Very well done. I like the fact that you mentioned Cracken's crack Cracken Flight Group. :p Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 23:30, September 13, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• This is going to need quite a few additions from the Atlas, which may take a little while. I'll note when I've done that. --Eyrezer 03:56, 29 August 2009 (UTC)
  • Can we get an update on this? I don't want to dive into the article not knowing if it might radically change in a few days. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 13:55, September 24, 2009 (UTC)
    • I didn't catch this earlier. Anyway, it is now updated with the Atlas info. --Eyrezer 04:05, November 9, 2009 (UTC)
• I'm looking at the Travel Times in the BTS section taken from Star Wars Rebellion and cringing. We all know Rebellion is a fairly dubious source for geography, and those times given are purely game mechanics. Plus the whole issue of travel times seems pretty inconsistent across the board anyway. I think it's best to remove it, what do you guys think? --Azizlight 01:45, October 2, 2009 (UTC)
  • The unreliability of Rebellion is clearly laid out just before the table, and the information is included in the Bts not the regular text, so I think itshould stay for completeness' sake. --Eyrezer 08:37, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:22, November 11, 2009 (UTC)