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G2 repair droid/Legends

  • Nominated by: Pyke syndicate AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:15, February 6, 2017 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: In commemoration for the 30th anniversary of Star Tours.

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Support

  1. Sorry for the delay. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:01, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  2. Johnny 5's younger cousin. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:31, February 21, 2018 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:27, September 26, 2018 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:18, September 26, 2018 (UTC)
  5. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 06:42, September 27, 2018 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 21:28, September 29, 2018 (UTC)
  7. NanoLuukeCloning facility 23:23, September 29, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead02
  • Where do the names A4-G2 and G2-7T actually come from? Looking in both sources they're referenced to, the images from their articles aren't named anywhere and I find it odd that both seem to have only first pictured listed in their appearances section. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • The opening sentence of the BTS seems to talk about a specific G2 not the series in general. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
  • "She went on to speculate that a G2's unending stream of conversation was responsible for problems with ships at Sluis Van Shipyards, out of which several ships had flows out of in the past several weeks, only to experience difficulty with one or more primary systems just after leaving the star system." This sentence needs some work, I assume flows out of is meant to just be flown? I'd also suggest changing up the use of several twice in a row. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:18, May 4, 2017 (UTC)
Imperators goose droid
  • Check your image caption punctuation.
  • Please make the captions of the last two images more varied and interesting.
    • Nothing to be done for G2-7T, but rewrote the latter. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • The non-canonical appearance in Apperances needs to be moved to a subsection.
  • Hmm, since you don't reference anything to G2 repair droid's CSWE entry, I have to ask if there even is one? If not, you should amend the CSWE listing in Sources to reflect which entries the droid was mentioned in.
    • There is, but IIRC, it is just a copy paste of TEGTD. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
  • Amazon backup link, please.
  • Hey, what's with the "in the galaxy" section? Can you rearrange the info so that there's no one-sentence paragraphs? And is there really no info on the last two G2 units mentioned in the section other than their names? Imperators II(Talk) 20:46, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
    • Fixed. The only reason we even have names for those droids is that they literally have them written on the side of their heads. So, no, we have additional context for them. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:33, September 24, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Some preliminaries: The introduction could definitely use some expansion. It's rather short compared to the body as is.
  • While there exists no LG entry for droid model articles, precedent indicates that a separate "Role" section could be employed and I definitely agree. The last paragraph in "Characteristics" seems to talk about what the droid could be used for rather than specific characteristics of the model.
  • As for the "G2 repair droids in the galaxy", I feel like it should be integrated into History rather than be its own section. It works well for species, but not so much for droids, I feel. Thoughts?
    • "ve started merging the sections, but I don't know how to handle droids like G2-7T, were we don't know where they exist in the timeline. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:50, March 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Do we not have a category for SoroSuub products? If not, I feel one should be created.
    • We do. The G2 cat is a subcat of it. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 00:49, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article is in Category:Pages with missing permanent archival links. Please fix. 1358 (Talk) 00:42, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
  • You have consecutive [2] references in "G2 repair droids in the galaxy". 1358 (Talk) 23:52, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Aesthetically, the article is a mess. I would recommend looking at it in Oasis if you haven't already to see what I mean:
    • The wall of text in the Characteristics section should be divided into at least two paragraphs.
    • Paragraph break(s), along with expanding the intro a substantial amount per ecks above (which I also would have objected to), will allow you to place that section's image in a less terrible spot. Currently, it's just sort of dropped awkwardly at the bottom of the section to avoid the infobox, which makes it bleed into the next section ("Role"). This should be avoided at all costs in every instance.
      • Done. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:01, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • That actually looks worse than what you had before. Images look particularly bad in Oasis if they're placed above a quote, especially if they're aligned left. The only way I can see this will work with the infobox is if you place the image before the second paragraph. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:05, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
          • Like so? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:19, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
            • Yes, that's the only place I can see it's going to look good left-aligned while working around the infobox. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:24, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • The Role section could also use a paragraph break. Remember, this is Oasis formatting now, which means we have a much narrower page margin to work with. Ten-line paragraphs are not ideal.
    • The History section could absolutely use at least two subsections. It's typically a nice divide to place four-paragraph sections equally into two subsections.
      • As its set up currently, you have a natural divide between the histroy of the model and a synopsys of the G2 droids we know were out there. How about something like "Manufacturing history" and "G2 repair droids in the galaxy"? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:05, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
        • As long as it looks good, you can subdivide it any way you want. It would look best if you had one image per subsection there. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:05, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
          • Does that look okay? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:26, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
            • Why not use a subsection heading for the first half? Of course "History" is applicable, but that's why we use subsections, to tell us specifically what part of its history we're looking at for that portion of the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:59, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • The third paragraph of the History section is a 16-line paragraph in Oasis with the image there. Paragraph breaks are needed here. Implement them with the previous objection in mind. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:36, March 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • Change reference 9 to use the more authoritative Penguin Random House site, along with the Penguin citation template. We should always be using information from the publisher where possible before resorting to Amazon. Remember that. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:14, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • I’ve cut the date down to 2006, as is the trend among featured articles as of late. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:29, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • Where exactly are you taking the intro quote from (I'm guessing it's from some EndorExpress transcript)? Because it's particularly poor in terms of grammatical/punctuation formatting.
    • Yeah, it matches what we've got on our transcript. I'll listen to the clip and fix it up. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:59, April 1, 2018 (UTC)
      • Does that look any better? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:43, April 6, 2018 (UTC)
        • It's better. But it's customary to punctuate laughter with commas (example: ha, ha, ha, ha). And it seems to me just from looking at this quote (I don't know if there's audio for this or any other kind of indication) that it would be better to punctuate it as "Excuse me, please, but you'll have to check that excess baggage. Huh? Oh, I'm terribly sorry. I didn't realize that was your husband." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:23, April 10, 2018 (UTC)
  • The idea of an in-universe subject being "notable" is almost entirely an OOU construct that we have invented for ourselves. Unless a source explicitly says that someone or something is notable, we should not be applying this term on our own. Consequently, the intro should avoid referring to those two G2 droids as such if there's no basis for their "notability" in source material.
  • After dividing the intro into two paragraphs, I'd like to see each paragraph provide some kind of date time frame for its events. For example, the first paragraph can mention that the droids rose to prominence in the early years of the Empire, while the second paragraph can mention that the droid was discontinued in 12 ABY before being reintroduced two years later.
  • The 19 BBY-9 BBY dates are exclusive to the infobox, for one. And secondly, those dates can't be sourced to NEGTD, as they are not mentioned in the G2 droid entry.
  • That YouTube clip you showed me of G2-4T has enough witty remarks that you should be able to stick another quote in the "G2 repair droids in the galaxy" subsection. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:29, April 11, 2018 (UTC)
    • Found a quote that directly mentions the model. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 08:33, April 18, 2018 (UTC)
  • Does Scavenger's say this directly about the G2 droid, or are you extrapolating this from the book's R2 section? If it's the latter, I would recommend just removing this, as it seems kind of trivial otherwise: "...a little shorter than standard R2-series astromech droids."
    • It's directly from the G2 entry in the book. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 19:25, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I thought this was kind of unusual in the infobox, and now that I see it here, I'm going to question what does a "color trim" mean? We can't identify the color of this trim? "...featuring a color trim."
    • Was was referencing how G2-4T had a red time, or 9T had a blue tim. I can remove it if it's unecessary. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 19:25, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'm not in favor of either of your two History subsection titles. A History subsection never needs to have the word "history" in it, which is redundant. And the second one really isn't specific enough for the contents of that subsection, as the first subsection also details G2 repair droids in the galaxy.
  • Why is the infobox sourcing SoroSuub Corporation to Strongholds of Resistance, and the History is sourcing it to NEGTD? Let's be consistent.
  • I think the BTS should make a brief mention that the droid was first featured in that 1986 Sunday Night Movie promo video, while saying that the G2 droids were identified as controllers and worker droids (IIRC). This sentence can go between the first and third sentences in the first paragraph. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:34, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I wasn't going to have you do so, but since you've opted to place the first-appearance tag on that promo video, I think you should also then place a {{C|First [[canon]]ical appearance}} next to Star Tours in the Appearances.
  • Plagiarizing another source is never permissible, even for one sentence. You lifted this sentence straight from that source. You'll now need to rewrite it. I'm aware you wrote this article prior to your official warning for copyright violation, so let this just be another reminder to you not to do this anymore. "G2-4T served as Star Tours' droid labor pool foreman, but he was given other tasks outside his intended programming, including handling ticketing, travel visas, and security checks."
    • Noted; rewrote several parts of the sentence, but kept his duties as is. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 23:32, April 23, 2018 (UTC)
  • With your recent edits to the BTS section, the two paragraphs of the "Continuity" subsection are extremely repetitive. Please rewrite. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:21, April 23, 2018 (UTC)
Tommy
  • "The G2's most recognizable feature was its binocular head, which contained a vocabulator[2] capable of communicating in both Basic and Binary,[3] two auditory sensors, and a pair[2] of blue[4] or white[1] photoreceptors[2] whose improved sensor packages[3] included telescopic, microscopic,[2] darkvision,[3] and multi-spectrum capabilities. Each droid bore a unique ID number stenciled onto the side of its head[2] in Aurebesh[1] or High Galactic, a tool kit, and a diagnostics package.[3]" Could you restructure this to reduce the number of refs? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 19:21, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
    • Does that look any better? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 20:32, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • The appearances section for Complete Guide to Star Tours lists the G2 repair droid. As the source is not included anywhere in the article, I would like it checked and any applicable information added to the article.
    • With the nominator gone, I'm going to make a halfhearted attempt to resolve any remaining objections on this nomination, having spent a fair amount of time reviewing this article up until now. I've added this item to the Sources list. There doesn't seem to be any indication when this thing was published, though it would be a safe guess to say circa 1987-1988, so I've placed it after the Starlog issue, which came out in May 1987. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 14:15, September 26, 2018 (UTC)
    • I should also add that there doesn't appear to be any additional information that needs to be added from this source. It only mentions the two G2 droids who appear in the ride, the details of which were repeated in another SW.com Blog article and are currently referenced in this article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 14:17, September 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • The article is currently in the Pages with missing permanent archival links category. Please correct this.
  • There is some information in the BTS quote that should be included in the BTS itself.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 02:15, September 26, 2018 (UTC)
    • I have restructured the BTS to satisfy my own objections above, which I believe has now satisfied this one. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:27, September 26, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:06, September 30, 2018 (UTC)