Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/EV-9D9 (second nomination)

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EV-9D9

  • Nominated by: AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:43, May 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I have taken care of the leftover objections from the original nomination.
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Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 20:45, June 26, 2020 (UTC)
  2. Fantastic work! RattsT (talk) 01:38, June 27, 2020 (UTC)
  3. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 17:33, July 1, 2020 (UTC)
  4. --TheTrooperGuy (talk) 20:27, July 1, 2020 (UTC)
  5. --Editoronthewiki (talk) 14:36, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  6. Impressive work! - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 20:30, October 17, 2020 (UTC)
  7. Looking good! Infectedzombieguy (talk) 05:35, 10 November 2020 (UTC)
  8. Cade999 (talk) 14:51, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
  9. Should've been FA the whole time! ~ D MCCG D MCCG (chat) 21:21, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
  10. Inqvote Thanks to J-Mac for handling my many objections on Discord and for assuming responsibility for the nomination. Great work! MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 22:17, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
  11. Inqvote Very good article. J-Mac, outstanding job handling the objections. Supreme Emperor Holocomm 03:39, 3 July 2021 (UTC)
  12. Nice ~ Loqiical (talk) 00:10, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
  13. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 18:43, 9 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

TQG
  • Can you please add her Topps Finest 2019 - Droids card from Star Wars Card Trader to the sources and check that it has no unique information (See here for more details+release date) Toqgers (talk) 06:43, May 17, 2020 (UTC)
    • It would be good to list this card in Sources even if it doesn't feature unique info. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk)
      • She's also mentioned in the 8D8 card for the set. Should I make entries for both cards on the Card Trader wiki? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:07, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
        • Why not? There's no harm in including them. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 23:38, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
          • Added both cards to the sources section, made them entires in the Card Trader wiki, and added what new information there was to this article. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:03, May 22, 2020 (UTC)
            • You also need to upload images of the cards to that wiki, so that there's a permanent record of them. Also as a note, set names in the template must be italicized. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 20:27, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
Editor
UberSoldat
  • "...a flaw many of her model shared." This reads a little confusing.
  • You need to state that Galactic Atlas also dates the Battle of Yavin to 0 BBY in the date note.
  • "When the Trandoshan bounty hunter Bossk, working to retrieve the droid for the Empire, tracked it to the palace, the supervisor droid explained that 261 had escaped, claiming that he would soon learn some respect." Please restructure this to reduce its run-on nature.
    • Rewritten. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:41, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
      • I still think you can do better, try something like "When Bossk tracked the droid to the palace after being hired by the Empire". UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:22, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • Han Solo, R2-D2 and C-3PO need context in the body.
    • Added context for Han, R2 and 3PO already have context later in the paragraph. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:41, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
      • Per precedent, the context is always provided on their first mention. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:22, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • "C-3PO, a protocol droid, was made Jabba's new interpreter, as his last one was disintegrated after it had angered him, and was fitted with a restraining bolt before being returned to the palace's main audience chamber, and R2-D2, an astromech droid, was forced to serve drinks aboard Jabba's sail barge, the Khetanna." This is also too much of a run-on.
    • Split sentence. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:41, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
      • This will work with the above objection, moving the context will reduce this sentence's run-on nature. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:22, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
        • Forgot to note I fixed this with a prior objection. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 05:02, June 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • "...and some very nasty reprogramming." This doesn't sound so formal and encyclopedic.
  • "She ordered the torture of any droid that disobeyed her commands and, more often than not, even those that obeyed her. EV-9D9 relished her role as taskmaster of all the palace's droids and loved disintegrating her subordinates." It looks like information on torturing subordinates/those who obeyed her is repeated here.
    • I disagree, the first sentence explains the circumstances under which she orders the torture of her subordinates. I've swapped the sentences to better clarify this. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:41, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • If there's no relation between EV and the console behind her, then the Equipment section should be removed entirely.
  • I think her appearance in the Battlefront games can be detailed in the BTS (i.e. name of the map where she can be found). UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 16:28, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
    • Added Battlefront info to Bts. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 02:21, May 30, 2020 (UTC)
      • Release dates for these content updates are needed too, with proper sources. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 14:50, June 2, 2020 (UTC)
        • Added. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:47, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
          • The WebCitation link for Welcome to the Outer Rim isn't functioning properly. Can you use Internet Archive or another alternative? We're moving away from WebCitation for backup links as the site doesn't do its job properly. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 04:54, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
            • I replaced it with an IA link, but the webpage doesn't seem to function properly when archived. However, the data is still accessible with the ctrl + u command. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 05:06, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please check Star Wars Helmet Collection and other De Agostini magazines for appearances. I'm certain she's appeared somewhere since this is a prominent character. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:05, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
  • You now have over five redlinks in the article. You'll need to create the pages for the magazines. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 06:56, June 6, 2020 (UTC)
    • That should be all of the redlinks taken care of. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:33, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
  • An {{Imagecat}} can be added. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:48, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • Article already had one (down in external links due to how things used to be formatted), but I've moved it up to appearances. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:29, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Now that she's confirmed to be in The Mandalorian, can you add a set photo from the show in the BTS? (this can be taken from Practical) UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:48, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please resolve the redlinks in the article. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 06:13, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • I think it would be better to move the image of 3PO and R2 to "The fall of a criminal empire," and have the old infobox image in the first section. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 06:22, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
    • Moved and added the old image back. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 07:16, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
      • Can you make some modifications so that the image does not indent the heading? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:24, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
        • Adjusting the size did nothing, so I decided to move it up. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 08:03, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please create a page for the card you just added on the Card Trader wiki as the link here is currently a redlink over there. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:56, September 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • Return of the Jedi: Beware the Power of the Dark Side! audiobook missing from Appearances. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 12:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
  • Article must include info from Chapter 5's concept art gallery. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 12:41, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
  • Precedent is to cite the newest edition of a book if it still has the same info as older ones, referring to the Ultimate Star Wars citation. Of course, it's needed for the 1stID in the BTS, but others can be replaced with New Edition. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 11:29, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
QGJ
  • Context for R2-D2 and C-3PO needed in the intro.
  • Some of the paragraphs look huge in the Oasis skin. Please introduce more paragraph breaks, especially in "Chief of Cyborg Operations", "Characteristics" and the Bts.
  • "Characteristics" also desperately needs an image.
  • Bts could use subsectioning
  • I would move that concept art from Appearances to the Bts.
  • Can you provide a quote for the "Galactic Civil War" section?
    • Moved quote from first section to second since its more relevant. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 01:09, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
  • Speaking of that section. Even though it's called "Galactic Civil War," the actual term is not mentioned once in that section. Maybe it's worth renaming it to something more relevant to EV-9D9?
  • The quote in the Bts would benefit from some context on Anthony Daniels
  • Is 261 supposed to be referred as "he" or "it?" There are instances of both pronouns. Please stick with one.
  • Her non-canon appearance in Disney Infinity 3.0 needs to be discussed in the Bts.
    • Added. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 05:00, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
      • I feel like this needs a tad more context. What is this Toy Box mode and what it involves? Just a few more words would suffice. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 18:34, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
        • Added some additional context. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 02:20, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • If she appears in Star Wars: The Original Trilogy – A Graphic Novel, she is likely to appear in Star Wars: Return of the Jedi Graphic Novel Adaptation as well. Please check and add to the "Appearances" if necessary. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:27, June 5, 2020 (UTC)
    • Can confirm that her appearance from the OT graphic novel is intact in the standalone RotJ version. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:47, June 16, 2020 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Just so this is a formal objection, this article needs to be updated with all missing Mandalorian content. Tommy-Macaroni 08:43, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Dup link.
    • Removed.
  • Quotes should not contain links.
    • Even when the subject is not mentioned/linked anywhere else?
      • Yes. Per the MoS: "Internal links should not be added to quotes because they serve little purpose beyond making the quotes appear cluttered and messy. Links should only be added in quote attributions and image captions if the subject is not linked in the article body already." Tommy-Macaroni 16:48, 30 April 2021 (UTC)
  • As she's been mentioned in several Build Your Own R2-D2 issues, I just want to confirm that the issues listed on the page have been checked and the rest of the series has been examined for extra mentions. Tommy-Macaroni 12:58, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
Ratts
  • Paragraph break needed in the intro.
  • Images need to be repositioned.
    • How do the images look now? - AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:18, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
      • Pretty good. As of now the concept art image should be moved to the left, but I assume you'll add a picture from Gallery that will offset it anyway. RattsT (talk) 21:26, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • A quote could be added to the first section of the bio. RattsT (talk) 20:31, June 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • In the Legacy section, can the capacity to which she's mentioned in Survival Skills be expanded?
    • Expanded. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 03:12, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
      • Now it's a run-on. You should break that sentence up. RattsT (talk) 03:51, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Details of the changes between her appearances in Jedi and Mando can be included in Characteristics.
    • By changes, due you literally mean her appearance or her personality - AV-6R7Crew Pit 01:32, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
      • I was referring to the physical changes, yeah; the photoreceptors changing from yellow to white, the insignia on her chestplate disappearing, etc; I don't know if we can really say her personality changed. Maybe just note that she was unhelpful to Djarin. RattsT (talk) 16:47, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
        • Her photoreceptors were always white in RotJ, but merch had them as yellow which has tripped us up for years. I rewatched the scene recently and they're white like in Mando. I'll add the symbols disappearing. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:48, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
          • Added info about her markings disappearing between 4 and 9 ABY. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 18:54, June 24, 2020 (UTC)
  • Mando BTS can be expanded with "Connections" info.
    • Expanded. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 04:55, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
      • One minor thing, the clause of Mark voicing her should be as close as possible to the subject. RattsT (talk) 16:47, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • Some minor objections while the Inuse template remains up:
    • In the final paragraph of the "Fall of a criminal empire" section, it should be noted who tasked R2 with his task.
    • Threepio's "Don't leave me!" quote is missing his "Oh!"
      • Added, as well as context for the "Oh!". - AV-6R7Crew Pit 02:05, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
        • I don't think the context is really necessary. RattsT (talk) 02:15, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
          • I think it's fine since he audibly collides with something in the audio for the quote. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 02:59, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • Mark Hamill's name is misspelled in the "Connections" quote. RattsT (talk) 01:24, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • "Tiny and basis, they were allowed her…" seems to have some grammatical mistakes. RattsT (talk) 00:50, June 25, 2020 (UTC)
  • Redlinks should be created. RattsT (talk) 16:47, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
Braha'tok enthusiast
  • Regarding the large paragraphs in the Characteristics and BtS sections:
    • Characteristics–I would recommend making the last two paragraphs in the characteristics a separate sub-section about EV's mechanical aspects (as that's what those two paragraphs describe) comprising of three paragraphs.
    • BtS–The 13 line paragraph in the Conception and Portrayal part of the BtS should be split. It's looking very chunky. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 15:11, July 1, 2020 (UTC)
OOM

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:43, 9 August 2021 (UTC)

  • Just noting that she is in the reference book Star Wars: Extraordinary Droids, which I've added to the sources, but there doesn't appear to be any new information in her entry that you need to add. I haven't read it cover to cover yet, but I don't think she's mentioned elsewhere, since she's not in Artoo or Threepio's entry and 8D8 doesn't have an entry of his own. Toqgers (talk) 22:30, June 13, 2020 (UTC)
    • Thanks, I had no idea that book was a thing. - AV-6R7Crew Pit 05:46, June 14, 2020 (UTC)