Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Duron Qel-Droma

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Duron Qel-Droma

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 03:15, January 1, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another Qel-Droma!

(4 Inqs/6 Users/10 Total)

Support

1. Duron! Menkooroo (talk) 00:58, February 1, 2013 (UTC)
2. Finally getting around to reviewing him, and freaking fantastic work. Glad to see all these KotOR-related noms from you, Floyd.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:32, February 1, 2013 (UTC)
3. Cade Calrayn 17:26, February 27, 2013 (UTC)
4. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 14:10, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
5. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 21:46, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
6. Solid work. 1358 ^(Talk) 23:57, March 9, 2013 (UTC)
7. Quite pleasant to read, too. --LelalMekha (talk) 03:41, March 10, 2013 (UTC)
8. Seems to me this one completes the family set. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:34, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
9. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 04:38, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
10. 501st dogma^(talk) 16:12, March 24, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Objection

• "A member of the Qel-Droma family of Jedi, Qel-Droma's cousin Ulic famously fell to the dark side..." The grammar here only works if Ulic is the member of the Qel-Droma family that's being referenced. I know that he is a member of the family, but since you mean Duron, I think it needs to be re-worded.
  • Fixed.
• The infobox lists Galactic Republic as an affiliation, but this isn't reflected in the rest of the article, which only mentions the Republic as teaming up with the Jedi to oppose Ulic in the Sith War.
  • Removed.
• "In 3,993 BBY, the Jedi Order began the Great Hunt.." Is that correct? Our Great Hunt article has it starting around two years prior to that. Menkooroo (talk) 11:19, January 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Yeah, I was wrong here. Fixed. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 22:36, January 31, 2013 (UTC)

Cadeth

• Just curious here, but shouldn't his homeworld be mentioned in the intro?
  • Mentioned.
• Personally, I'd changed the "Qel-Droma to restore..." to "Duron to restore..." in the intro, as it's kind of confusing about which Qel-Droma you're talking about. You don't specify Ulic's fate, which I don't think you should in the intro, but it'd be more straightforward if you referred to him as Duron here.
  • Fixed.
• I'll continue later. Cade Calrayn 22:48, February 26, 2013 (UTC)

Coruscant bureaucracy

• As a reader, the last sentence of the "Personalities and traits" second paragraph completely threw me. It may work better if placed at the very beginning of that whole section. Coruscantfan ^(Talk) 03:18, March 7, 2013 (UTC)
  • Done. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 04:58, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

Ayrehead

• Could the Sith apprentice that Saresh seduces get a link?
  • Linked.
• You mention Duron's datapad being with his body but make no mention of it before the legacy section. Could it be mentioned that he writes one and brings it with him? Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:13, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Done. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 22:53, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

501st

• The intro seems to say that the relationship between the two Jedi had begun before the Korriban incident. However, the bio does not mention it until during the last mission. Perhaps you should fix it. 501st dogma^(talk) 00:31, March 14, 2013 (UTC)
  • Made it more consistent. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 23:04, March 17, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:15, March 24, 2013 (UTC)