Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dllr Nep

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Dllr Nep

• Nominated by: Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 15:57, April 1, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Best read over a few mugs of the juice!

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Just a couple of tense tweaks. Excellent read, GT. Maybe one of my new favorite characters. — Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 20:14, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
2. Imperialles 21:41, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
3. Great job. I always liked this character from the X-Wing series.—Tommy ⁹²⁸¹ 21:53, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
4. Although Requiem is still just total randomness. Thefourdotelipsis 01:40, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
5. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 19:11, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
6. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 01:11, May 19, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. A few things:
   • You use the term "the Rogues" throughout the article, which seems somewhat informal. Disregard this if the term was formally used by the NR military, of course.
     • It's used IU by NR military personnel, and we use it throughout on Rogue Squadron FAs including Celchu, Janson and Horn. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • Joining Rogue Squadron: "the half strength Rogues soon found themselves in combat against a squadron of Imperial TIE fighters" Why were they half strength? It's never explained in the article. Add some context on this, if it's relevant/available.
     • It isn't stated why, but there are only six of them on this mission. I can ditch it if you want, but they are at half strength. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • Joining Rogue Squadron: "Though Rogues Squadron successfully defeated the Imperials, Rogue Squadron pilot Wes Janson" Excessive Rogue Squadroning here. I'm guessing "Rogues Squadron" is a typo.
     • One less Rogue Squadron and yes it was. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • Mission to Tatooine: Some context on Jabba would be nice.
     • Added. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • The warrior princess: "Imperial blaster fire. The Rogues moved to investigate but soon found themselves under Imperial fire" Two sentences in a row ending with the word fire.
     • Changed the second. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • The warrior princess: Make sure you introduce the abbreviation "PLB" before using it. Something like "People's Liberation Battalion (PLB)" should do the trick.
     • Probably best avoided entirely. Reworded. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • Final mission: "Both Nep and I'ngre's became Force ghosts" The 's seems to be a typo.
     • Yup. Fixed. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
   • Very well written. --Imperialles 21:13, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
     • Thanks. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• ". . .who distinguished himself on the mission to Mrllst . . ." Should this be Mrlsst? Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 21:48, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • Yes it should. Changed. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 01:24, April 10, 2010 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:11, May 19, 2010 (UTC)