Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Darth Azard

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Darth Azard

  • Nominated by: Grunny (Talk) 12:49, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first FA nom :)

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Support thee, I do.—Tommy9281Dark Side Master TotG (Peace is a lie) 22:31, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Already raked this squid over the coals on the GAN. Graestan(Talk) 22:39, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
  3. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 23:12, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
  4. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 06:51, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:24, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
  6. I support it.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 15:58, 28 February 2009 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote --Eyrezer 10:13, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 00:34, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. File:Darth Azard2.jpg, File:Darth Azard.jpg, File:MassacreonDac.jpg, File:DuelOnDac.jpg, File:Invoke.jpg and File:AzardProtectionBubble.jpg are all distorted and should be re-scanned. --Imperialles 18:54, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
    • I cannot provide better scans at this time. However, I believe these images are of "of sufficient quality to illustrate the article" as the rules state. Grunny (Talk) 15:31, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
      • Struck with the caveat that the images be replaced when better versions are available. --Imperialles 07:59, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
  2. From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
    • Haven't read the whole thing, but I intend to soon. I like the character and had intended to FA him myself someday, so I want the article to be as good as it can be. :-) For a couple of preliminaries: could the "Massacre..." section be split in two? It'll make it more uniform with the size of the other sections and having two images in the same smallish section looks a bit messy, imho (speaking of which, I've reduced the size of some of the images, if that's alright - 300px looks messy). I think the P&T could be expanded a little; elaborate things fully through, for example his feelings about Isen currently get a sentence but I think it could be expanded to a small paragraph. Isen should specifically be mentioned, etc. Also, you could note that he wasn't an expert on Sith lore and history, since he didn't know anything/much about the Leviathan. Last sentence in the BtS will need to be referenced. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:25, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
      • I've split the "Massacre..." section, expanded the P&T, and referenced the BtS. I like the character too, and I'm waiting for the next issue to expand it fully. I look forward to your thorough review :-). Grunny (Talk) 02:14, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
    • The intro looks a little bit too big for an article of its size. Especially when new info will have to be added to it soon. I would suggest cutting it down a little bit, either now or when the next issue is out. I made a few cuts here and there but here are some more suggestions for ones I thought too large to cut without talking to you:
      • "after Krayt deposed Emperor Roan Fel" is something I'd definitely say could be cut from the intro, since it's not particularly relevant to Azard.
        • Cut :). Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
      • "Valan had already faced Stazi, during the last battle of the Sith-Imperial War, and had been blamed for Stazi's escape" - this is another thing that, although it would certainly merit inclusion in the bio, isn't particularly relevant to the intro, which ought to be nicely succinct.
        • Also cut. Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
      • "who had been sent by Emperor-in-exile Roan Fel to warn Gar Stazi that they had sabotaged the Imperious" could be rephrased to "who were on a mission for Emperor-in-exile Roan Fel," or somesuch.
        • Rephrased :). Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
    • In the aftermath of the massacre, pursued the escaping members Rogue Squadron who had been involved in the plan to capture the Imperious -- missing a word here, before pursued. Presumably it's Azard, but I wanted to make sure.
      • Yes it is, silly mistake on my part. Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
    • This isn't an objection, just a pointer: with sentences like "The Toydarian information broker Niffla, informed Valan" that comma is unneeded. Another is "Realizing the officer had been mind-tricked; Azard killed him" - that semicolon should just be a comma. The colon should only be used when the two parts of it could stand alone as separate sentences. I'll obviously fix any instances of these I find, but it's something to watch out for.
      • I'll check my work for such mistakes :). Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
    • The third paragraph in "Massacre..." trails off from the subject a bit. Obviously the info is necessary to establish, but I think it could be cut down a fair bit in detail.
      • How's that? :) Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
        • I wouldn't mind a little bit more cut, but looking at it there's nothing that really stands out so it's up to you.
    • Ronto's introduced rather suddenly in the P&A, without even a link. I wouldn't even bother to name him, just say the Rogues or whatever.
      • Good point. Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
      • Excellent stuff overall, glad to have a new FA writer. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:51, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
        • Thanks AdmirableAckbar :-). Grunny (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
          • No worries. Good work on my objections. My only concern is supporting this nom is that we know a fair bit of new info on the character will be released soon, probably after this passes FAN. Not that I don't think you'll do a good job updating, but any new info won't go through the proper FAN review process. I'm not really sure what our procedure should in these cases. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:24, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

Strike Imp's objection

  1. Inqvote --Eyrezer 10:44, 5 March 2009 (UTC) It's been unanswered for just over 2 weeks, and with the new CT, it seems appropriate.
  2. Inqvote CT yadda yadda yadda. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:24, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Sorry, Imp. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:17, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Duh. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:04, 5 March 2009 (UTC)

Comments

  • Azard appears in the latest Legacy issue, Legacy 32. It looks like he'll also be appearing in issue 33 as well. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:38, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
    • I've added Legacy 32. I'll just have to wait until Legacy 33 comes out :). Grunny (Talk) 03:21, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
      • I have now added Legacy 33 :-). Grunny (Talk) 12:55, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
  • Personal preference, but considering the new material from Legacy 33, I would like to see the {{spoiler}}/{{tl|endspoiler}} templates used in the text. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:17, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
    • I have added the templates :-). Grunny (Talk) 10:29, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:34, 9 March 2009 (UTC)