Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Daro

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Daro

  • Nominated by: Erebus Chronus (Talk) 02:20, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 18:51, 21 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1655 words (213 introduction, 1334 body, 108 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:AST, WP:AMB, WP:TCW

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 18:10, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 05:41, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 16:42, 15 October 2023 (UTC)
  4. Bonzane10 Sabine Starbird (holonet) 14:47, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 17:46, 20 November 2023 (UTC)
  6. My copy-edit OOM 224 (he/him) 18:49, 21 November 2023 (UTC)

Object

Imp
  • Looks like Humans residing on Daro is infobox-exclusive. Imperators II(Talk) 12:13, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
    • I thought that would be covered by the atmosphere part in Description. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:50, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
      • Look at Dagobah, for example. The fact that it had an atmosphere breathable to humans doesn't mean they necessarily resided there (at least until Luke's arrival or whatever.) Imperators II(Talk) 16:30, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
        • I fit them into an Inhabitants section. How does that work? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 18:33, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
          • That looks good!
  • "The thousands of trees engulfed Daro's[1] peppered[3] landscape of towering rocky mountains[1] and buttes,[6] the cliffs of which were enveloped by the trees' expansive roots.[1]" — peppered with what? (The mountains and the buttes, I presume.)
    • Ah yes. The audio description says "peppered with rock formations." Rearranged the wording.
  • Whom is the lead quote addressed to? The "A 'simple' extraction" quote should likewise indicate to whom and about whom is Hunter speaking. And (personally this one kept me guessing the most - I'm assuming Omega means "tell the rest of the Bad Batch to return later to rescue Hunter from captivity?) personally the "A botched escape" quote especially should note who is "them".
    • For the first one, the quote is referring to rescuing Gregor is a lot for them. The second one, we discussed on Discord.
      • What about the lead quote? And what about the "We're banking a lot" quote - is Hunter speaking to any particular member of the Bad Batch, or the group in general? Imperators II(Talk) 18:22, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
        • Hunter is speaking out loud, in front of the whole squad. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:27, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
          • Can you denote that in the caption? And what about the lead quote? Imperators II(Talk) 18:24, 16 September 2023 (UTC)
            • both should be addressed. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:16, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
              • Just to confirm: is Wrecker really not speaking to a specific member of the team there but rather to the group in general? Imperators II(Talk) 15:32, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
  • Is the double "quickly" yours or the source's? Imperators II(Talk) 17:36, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • I think there's room in the BtS for one of the concept art pieces to be tucked in.—spookywillowwtalk 17:26, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
    • does that work?
  • Would be good to make a run through these for additions I think, offhand pretty sure the declassified sw.com article and the Insider article are missing.—spookywillowwtalk 17:26, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
    • You're right. I meant to add them before I nominated. Guess I forgot. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 00:32, 15 October 2023 (UTC)
Anil
  • I think the BTS is partially incorrect about the concept artist credits. Jim Moore seems to be the illustrator for more than just the full planetary overview, such as butte illustrations that are attributed to the other artists in the article. Also, Slide 13 contains Daro concept art by Matthew Mossman, who is not mentioned in BTS.
    • Should be sorted now Lewisr (talk) 04:50, 19 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Also about BTS, I'm not really sure if there's a discrepancy in the opening scene. After smelling a piece of wood and looking around, Hunter just says that "[Gregor] was dragged," without suggesting an exact spot where he was captured. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:19, 7 November 2023 (UTC)
    • Removed Lewisr (talk) 04:50, 19 November 2023 (UTC)

Comments

  • Note for reviewers: I will be unavailable to answer objections/comments for 10 days. I am gone from the 25th to the 3rd. Any objections will be handled when I return. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 14:52, 25 August 2023 (UTC)
    • I am back from my vacation! I can handle any objections from here onward. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 22:33, 3 September 2023 (UTC)
  • One thing I noticed in this article that you should be mindful of in the future is generally presenting information from an omniscient perspective instead of the protagonists' limited perspective (the article kept introducing things as the Bad Batch were learning about them). Imperators II(Talk) 17:36, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
    • Mind providing an example of an instance for future nominations? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:25, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
      • Sure, the prime example here was how the discovery of the Imperial base was framed. The reader already knows from earlier in History that the Empire established a base there, so the section discussing the Bad Batch's discovery of it need not go into such detail, for example. Imperators II(Talk) 10:49, 21 September 2023 (UTC)
  • I'll be handling any potential objections Lewisr (talk) 07:12, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:50, 21 November 2023 (UTC)