Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Cormun (Imperial Army)

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Cormun (Imperial Army)

  • Nominated by: Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 01:45, June 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Was going for GAN, but I ended up with 1,281 words. WP:TOR fun!

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Plagueis327 03:23, June 21, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:51, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:14, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 00:45, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 21:57, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 22:47, August 3, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Trayus
  • Because the date 3641 BBY is never provided in-game and that specific dating system does not come from the game itself, you'll need an independent reference. Check out the note here and in other game-era articles. Best practice would be to use a citation such as that when sourcing anything to the 3643 BBY date. If you can do what you can to ensure any of your other TOR articles reflect this as well, it would be much appreciated. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 20:18, June 25, 2012 (UTC)
    • So do you want me to use 3643 BBY or 3641 BBY? I'm not sure which you intended.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:55, June 25, 2012 (UTC)
      • Either way works. Erickson said ten to twelve years, so as long as you use "around" or "approximately," either is roughly correct. Just be sure to pick one and source it. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 02:49, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
        • On this nomination, Menk has suggested that we used the range of dates 3643 BBY to 3641 BBY. If this is the way we decide to go, how would I handle articles like Zirchros that have a date that uses the game's date. Figured it would be best to iron everything out before making changes.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 01:53, June 27, 2012 (UTC)
          • I fixed Cormun, sometime later today I will fix the rest of my articles.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 12:47, June 27, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • Naming: shouldn't the article be at "Cormun (Human)" rather than "Corman (Imperial Army)"? I think species as a descriptor is preferred over affiliation if known. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 19:17, July 17, 2012 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Please go through and double-check the article for linking to make sure that everything is linked where it needs to be. I'll review the rest of the article once this is done. CC7567 (talk) 23:49, August 2, 2012 (UTC)
    • I went through it a couple of times and I think I found everything I missed.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 00:13, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
  • {{Fact}} tag in the body. Please make sure not to forget refs next time. CC7567 (talk) 00:22, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
Egg sacs
  • There's a bit of repetition in the intro: A sentence begins with "After losing these troops," and the following sentence leads off with "After the slaughter of his troops," --- maybe jettison one of them? Not really necessary to say the same thing twice, especially in the intro.
  • Ref [1] appears twice in a row at the beginning of the bio --- is one of them supposed to be something else?
  • The opening of the second paragraph of the bio kind of repeats itself, too: The first sentence says that they took heavy casualties, and the second sentence says that they retreated. The third and fourth sentences go on to say the same thing, but with a little bit of new information. Is there any chance you could merge and reduce the info so as to avoid repetition?
  • A bit of play-by-play in the bio: "The Sergeant explained the situation and asked for assistance," "He maintained that his troops had..." "He further told the acolyte..." Can you pare down the conversation into a summary that gets the main points across? Details like his views on his troops' competence are in the P&T and don't necessarily need to be in the bio.
  • Is the item that the player receives for completing the quest different every time? If not, can you state what the item is; if so, can you call it "randomly-selected" or something? Menkooroo (talk) 18:15, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
    • Added items, should I create articles for these?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:36, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
      • My first thought was yes, since they seem similar to some of your recent GAs. But I won't leave it an objection, since redlinking them would still leave the article under the redlink limit. Menkooroo (talk) 21:57, August 3, 2012 (UTC)

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