- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Carlist Rieekan
- Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 03:06, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: NO! No cheese! It's celery, apples, walnuts, grapes! In mayonnaise!
(0 Inqs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
- Still don't get the joke in the comment.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 18:36, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Farl, 1st part
Bio/The Destruction: "Furthermore, Rieekan felt that a mass evacuation would show the Empire that the people of Alderaan were aware of the Death Star's ability to destroy planets, which was also its purpose." I'm confused. The purpose of what? Do you mean that the DS was built specifically to destroy planets? I don't think that would be important. Do you mean that DS was there to destroy Alderaan? That's arguable, as Tarkin intended to obtain a confession from Leia. Do you mean that the purpose of a mass evacuation was due to the DS's ability to destroy planets? Could you please reword this?- Yeah, it is confusing. Removed.
Bio/Trouble in: "Agent Targeter also confirmed that no one had been tracking Porter." I guess Targeter was a Rebel agent but, could you please specify?- Clarified.
When first mentioning Disra, could you specify his allegiance to the Empire?- Since he's introduced as a subordinate to the Imperial Governor Choard, I think that's already clear.
Bio/Working with: "Rieekan was contacted by Crix Madine, who was now an officer" This is your first mention to Madine (except for the intro, which doesn't count). You must link him, give some context and not say that he was "now" an officer - we don't know what he was before. Alternatively, you might mention Madine before that, saying that he and Rieekan... were friends/worked together/knew each other/knew each other's reputation. Whatever as long as you can source it.- Madine is already mentioned in the first paragraph of the bio. Thefourdotelipsis 14:18, July 17, 2010 (UTC)
"Rogue Squadron were busy" <- "was busy"? "RS pilots were busy"?- Changed.
Bio/Continued: Per Trak: "Afterwards" is slang.- Removed.
Context and link for Risiev Credal! But on his first mention, not two paragraphs later.- Whoops, the paragraphs got switched around there. It's been rearranged.
I'd also add context to Romas Navander, Wyron Serper and these people whenever needed.- Done.
--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:18, July 17, 2010 (UTC)- Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 00:47, July 21, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
- The information from Freedom No More is not comprehensive and is lacking detail. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:37, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
- I made a few simple factual corrections to the Rebel Force section of the article, specifically that Ferus resigned as a Padawan and was never knighted, and that X-7, despite the name, was in fact a living being. I explained these during our discussion a couple months ago, but you must have missed them. Let me know if have any questions about what I changed. :) —Master Jonathan
(Jedi Council Chambers) 03:31, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
- Gah! I thought I'd fixed those things. Apologies. It all got a bit out of hand, as you can see. Thefourdotelipsis 04:11, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)
Three-week idle objection. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:25, October 22, 2010 (UTC)- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 21:30, October 22, 2010 (UTC) - CC7567 (talk) 08:49, October 23, 2010 (UTC)
- --Eyrezer 11:10, October 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 19:32, October 23, 2010 (UTC)
