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Battle droid dispenser

  • Nominated by: AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 21:54, 20 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Previous CAN/GAN
  • Date Archived: 06:59, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1225 words (132 introduction, 946 body, 147 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 1028 words (93 introduction, 785 body, 150 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 1237 words (146 introduction, 941 body, 150 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:VG, WP:CIS

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Support

  1. As always, just check my edit :) Great work! Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 12:14, 25 February 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote OOM 224 (he/him) 21:49, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 21:33, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 23:04, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
  5. Great work! Cyborg Commando (talk) 19:37, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
  6. TomotronSith Quad-SunSith Council 02:42, 9 April 2024 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 06:58, 15 April 2024 (UTC)

Object

Manoof
  • Great job so far! Ok so the ensuing blaster fire bit, you need to establish what is happening here and that they engaged whatever enemy. The but you added is great! Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 03:02, 21 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Awesome just look over my edits and make sure you're happy :) Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 09:39, 21 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Looks like you missed this objection "BTS notes that it doesn't deploy more than 3 droids at a time, which is redundant to the description part of the body" Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 03:02, 21 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Addressed objections. Thanks for all the support! AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 03:21, 21 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Did I imagine but wasn't there a bit in the BTS noting the dispensers would spawn infinite droids until destroyed? I think its relevant and should be noted Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 09:39, 21 February 2023 (UTC)
    • I added it back. I had previously removed it due to confusion with one of your objections. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 13:20, 21 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Can we add to the intro a brief mention of their use in the takeover of the Prosecutor and Kashyyyk, and try rewording some of the sentences as all but one start with "The", which makes it feel almost like a list of facts. Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 13:05, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Just double checking the game does use "him" when referring to Boss, confirming the pronoun use is correct. Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 13:05, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Can you clarify if the dispenser boss shot and dropped gets destroyed or damaged (assuming it doesn't dispense droids) Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 13:05, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Hangar D, from memory this was a mix of dispensers, can you clarify this and any other bits where other dispensers where used in conjunction with the battle droid dispensers Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 13:05, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Can you please clarify that they saved the prosecutor by calling reinforcements that destroyed the attacking ship? Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 13:05, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Kashyyyk you mention the mission being completed but don't really provide context on what the mission was. Manoof (he/him/his) RainbowRebellion2 13:05, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Addressed. People use he/him pronouns when referring to Boss in the game. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 15:28, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
Lew
  • Could you split the intro into two paragraphs?
  • Barring the date, the 'Chaykin Cluster' paragraph is unsourced Lewisr (talk) 06:57, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
  • I noticed there were multiple instances of slavers being used, per the new standard being implemented you'll need to update the wording of these to enslavers Lewisr (talk) 15:01, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
  • I think it'd be worth including a mention of "(RAS)" at the first mention of the Acclamator or it's not immediately clear what RAS later refers to when used in front of the Arrestor Lewisr (talk) 21:50, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
    • Is my change fine, or would you prefer if I put it after "Prosecutor" and changed it to "(RAS Prosecutor)." AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 22:45, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
      • Your change works fine with me, thanks! Lewisr (talk) 23:04, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
spookly
  • Per the top quote, it seems that sometimes, they're simply called "droid dispensers." It'd make sense then if it was noted as a shortened version of the name, ie. (also known simply as droid dispensers…)
  • I think the sentence making up the second paragraph of the intro can be split up a bit. With a bit more breathing room that that would provide, we can also see one or two BBY dates added to the intro.
  • That top paragraph of the History should be under a subsection, so that every part of the article is under some sort of section.
  • Seems like the BtS is large enough to use an image down there, even if that's just of the game cover.—spookywillowwtalk 01:32, 25 December 2023 (UTC)
  • Per the clone name policy update I don't think all the clones need to have their numbers there; just their names a la this.
  • I think there's room for another image in the Description if there's another shot somewhere of it in the game.
  • First two subsections of the History should be merged; as the top one is a solo-paragraph section and the one following is just two, even if that's just labeling it all 'Earlier usage in the Clone Wars.' In principle, I also disagree with a section being labeled 'overview' because all such details should be presented chronologically and not in a summary, so this solves two birds with one stone.—spookywillowwtalk 02:35, 24 March 2024 (UTC)
    • Addressed all except the image, that might take me a few hours to get. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 14:02, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
      • Added what was previously the infobox image to the description and added a better shot of the dispenser to the infobox. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 21:31, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
Dani is working towards that Dathomirian nom
  • Shouldn't the clone not recongizing the dispenser (lead quote) be prosified? NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 01:15, 7 January 2024 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • Is it possible to get a better (more centered, no logo in the bottom right) screenshot for the infobox? Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 10:59, 11 January 2024 (UTC)
OOM
  • Nice work! Here's my copy-edit. Please note that referring to the squad collectively as "they" is correct in British English, but groups are treated as singular entities in American English (which Wookieepedia unfortunately uses as standard).
  • Since "droid dispenser" is just a descriptive, partial name, it doesn't need to be listed separately in the intro.
  • The full name should be mentioned in the first instance in the article body.
  • Since the Trandoshans were working with the CIS, I don't think they should be listed in the infobox. I also think that the CIS should be moved from the "Owners" field to the "Affiliation" field.
  • The colours could be noted in the infobox.
    • Which field would this go in? AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 13:00, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
      • They could work as descriptors in the structure field, since it's already filled in. OOM 224 (he/him) 13:08, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
        • Does that look good? AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 22:11, 21 March 2024 (UTC)
          • Looks amazing OOM 224 (he/him) 21:49, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
  • Missing {{Mediacat}} OOM 224 (he/him) 11:47, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
Imp
  • "Star Wars: Republic Commando places the Mission to Kashyyyk directly before the Battle of Kashyyyk, which The New Essential Chronology dates to 19 BBY. Thus, the mission must take place in 19 BBY as well." — unless we know that the battle and the mission did *not* take place close to the 20 BBY-19 BBY boundary, this should be changed to "around 19 BBY". Imperators II(Talk) 12:55, 25 March 2024 (UTC)
    • Addressed. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 14:02, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
      • Per Cyborg, I actually was able to narrow it down to 19 BBY. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 15:17, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
        • I'm not sure why the reference note says "if The Essential Atlas dates the Battle of Kashyyyk months into 19 BBY" - does it or does it not establish that? What info specifically says that? Imperators II(Talk) 20:02, 12 April 2024 (UTC)
          • My apologies, the more correct word is "since." The book concretely states that the battle took place months into the year. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 22:46, 12 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Chaykin Cluster — as I'm entering the second paragraph I'm surprised to learn that the Separatists are carrying out salvaging operations aboard the Prosecutor - this needs to be brought up earlier.
  • "Republic commando Scorch attempted to rendezvous with Boss, who was trapped behind a door" — behind a door where? The Prosecutor presumably, but this really should be made clearer.
  • "an enslaver pushed a droid dispenser - any info on pushed where/in what direction?
  • Reviewing note: you should watch out for successive short sentences that can sometimes get a bit choppy. Imperators II(Talk) 17:27, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
Cyborg
  • Per the above date thing with Imp—Ryan Kaufman, one of the lead writers of Republic Commando, confirmed that the mission was meant to take place days before the Battle of Kashyyyk. I believe Order 66: A Republic Commando Novel can be used for further dating needs. I don't own the novel myself, but it'd be a good thing to check. The video game does provide a date, but it is erroneous. See the Mission to Kashyyyk (Clone Wars) BtS for more details, it even has a citable link to a message board for the Kaufman confirmation. Cyborg Commando (talk) 05:38, 29 March 2024 (UTC)
    • Thank you so much, I was able to use the novel to narrow it down. Could you take a look at the new ref note. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 15:17, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
      • I corrected a quick typo. Other than that, if it works for Imp, it works for me. Cyborg Commando (talk) 19:34, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 06:58, 15 April 2024 (UTC)