Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Attack on Fondor

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Attack on Fondor

• Nominated by: UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:52, 5 June 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: First time doing a battle longer than CA length. I decided not to include info from "Destroyer Down" as the battle in that story is pretty much unrelated to this one.
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:AMB, WP:SWBF, WP:VG

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Support

1. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:48, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
2. Nicely done. DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:50, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
3. Great work, in my opinion! LucaRoR (talk) 17:19, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
4. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:31, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
5. OOM 224 21:16, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
6. Imperators II^(Talk) 12:14, 31 December 2021 (UTC)
7. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 16:20, 31 December 2021 (UTC)

Object

Average Battlefront enjoyer

• Does the game say the Corvus is a Raider II specifically? Otherwise you should source that to the databank. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 10:41, 5 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:50, 5 June 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Perhaps some context for Sentinel?
• I think you can add a {{Mediacat}}, no? JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:40, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:06, 13 June 2021 (UTC)

Regular FA consumer

• I don't think the outcome field in the infobox should be written in present tense, unless that's a precedent I've never noticed. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 08:23, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
  • There certainly is. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:27, 27 July 2021 (UTC)

Ratts

• "…at Fondor Station within the Fondor Shipyards over the world Fondor…" can you reword or rearrange this? It's a bit repetitive.
• There's little mention of the dialogue between Iden and Raythe during the mission. While not all of it is relevant, they do discuss tactics that affect how the battle plays out, so I think that should be touched upon.
• "As the battle progressed, Versio destroyed multiple fighters tailing Hask's TIE fighter." That's not necessarily true, since two of the fighters are scripted to crash during the chase scene, regardless if Iden shoots them or not. The player is only required to destroy one ship during this objective, being the A-wing.
• In the last paragraph of "Imperial victory," you should clarify that Iden destroys both the control tower and the docking arm, an order she initially objects to. RattsT (talk) 01:49, 1 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Handled via Discord. RattsT (talk) 09:04, 1 August 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• "Inferno Squad fought through rebel forces and fled the moon in TIE fighters" — I don't see how this is relevant to the article.
  • Not sure how else to explain Inferno Squad leaving the moon and splitting up. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:47, 24 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Fair enough OOM 224 18:33, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
• Similarly, I think you can cut down on the details about Meeko's mission to Pillio. The mission doesn't really tie in to what the Empire achieved at Fondor other than the fact that it's a part of Operation: Cinder that came right after the battle for Inferno Squad. OOM 224 12:38, 24 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Removed the outcome. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:47, 24 October 2021 (UTC)
• Would it not be worth including Ralsius Paldora's mention of the attack in the article body? OOM 224 18:33, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Sure. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:56, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Added info from "Destroyer Down" per discussion with other editors. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:28, 16 June 2021 (UTC)
  • So, I'm not going to make this an objection, since I'm unsure of it, but I feel like the destroyer down section could start with "The Galactic Civil War returned to Fondor shipyards around 5 ABY when..." I feel like including that could explain to readers why its being recounted, since that's why we on the discord agreed it should be mentioned. Maybe this is just me so I'm framing this as a comment, not an objection, if anyone wants to weigh in feel free Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:13, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
    • It works either way, but it's not really necessary since the mere presence of the info makes it pretty obvious that it's relevant to the subject. OOM 224 21:16, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• Updated with info from Emperor Palpatine. UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:31, 16 June 2021 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:48, 31 December 2021 (UTC)