Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/3D-4X administrative droid

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3D-4X administrative droid

• Nominated by: Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 23:45, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Part 1A of Unofficial Cav Project: Genetech/Geentech

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:53, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
2. Cade Calrayn 20:38, June 2, 2013 (UTC)
3. Winterz (talk) 13:53, August 20, 2013 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 08:58, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:29, September 21, 2013 (UTC)
6. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:29, September 22, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Cadeth

• Context on Cybot Galactica in the intro? Maybe "their rival" or something?
  • Added.
• "without organic supervision without anyone in the wider galaxy knowing," Too many withouts. Cade Calrayn 14:31, May 28, 2013 (UTC)
  • Now without the first without. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:34, May 29, 2013 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• There are two consecutive references to The Essential Guide to Droids in the first paragraph of History. Please check. CC7567 ^(talk) 06:21, June 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • Good catch. Removed duplicate reference. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:36, June 19, 2013 (UTC)
• Context needed on Tyko Thul in "3D-4Xs in the galaxy."
  • Added.
• Since most of the publications mentioned in the Bts include the publication year, could you also provide the year for Therefore I Am?
  • It's already there: The 3D-4X administrative droid first appeared in Kevin J. Anderson's Therefore I Am: The Tale of IG-88, one of five stories included in the Tales of the Bounty Hunters collection published in 1996.
    • Whoops, missed that. CC7567 ^(talk) 08:58, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
• Would it be applicable to add {{1stp}} to The Essential Guide to Droids in the Sources?
  • Added.
• This is extremely (and I mean extremely) nitpicky, but there are some instances in the article that use the Oxford comma (e.g. "the model's features, history, and creation" in the Bts) and others that do not (e.g. "business, administrative and financial procedures" in the intro). Both usages are correct, but I would recommend selecting one or the other for all instances, so that the article is consistent. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:01, August 20, 2013 (UTC)
  • I think I got them all - I prefer the use of the Oxford comma myself, so that should be the standard. If I missed any, let me know. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:42, August 21, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 03:34, September 22, 2013 (UTC)