Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Way of Schesa

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Way of Schesa

• Nominated by: —TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:56, May 26, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Bob's dream being fulfilled.

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Nice article, TK. You're a welcome addition to the review pages here on Wookieepedia.—Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 23:12, May 29, 2011 (UTC)
   • Thanks! :)—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 13:41, June 1, 2011 (UTC)
2. What Axinal said. ~Savage 02:44, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
3. A bit emdash heavy, but I'll let it slide this time. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:08, June 4, 2011 (UTC)
4. Another good job, TK.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:42, June 9, 2011 (UTC)
5. Imperators II^(Talk) 12:51, June 10, 2011 (UTC)

Object

1. Ecks Dee
   • The Bts is too similar to your other trade route CANs. There is no point in just copypasting the same text into multiple articles. Please reword.
     • Done.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:53, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • "The Phalanx Route first.." I though the article was about the Way of Schesa...
     • Sorry—continuity error removed.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:53, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • "Chiss Ruling Families—, within" I don't think there should be commas or spaces after an emdash.
     • Spacing removed.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:53, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • Please do not abbreviate the CEDF.
     • Full name substituted.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:53, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • You have two ^[2] after each other; should one of them be another reference?
     • Accident; fixed.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:53, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • Reference 5 has an error: The Essential Atlas, p. i" Page i? 1358 ^(Talk) 06:49, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
     • Pages around the table of contents are marked with Roman numerals in the Atlas (i-x; non-capitalized). Otherwise, thanks for the review!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:53, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
       • I see. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:08, June 4, 2011 (UTC)
2. Axinal
   • Do you think you could create an article for the civil war in which the "former Ruling Family" fought? Actually, an article for the ruling family itself might be good, too, even if both articles would require conjecture tags. Otherwise, good work.—Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 00:01, May 28, 2011 (UTC)
     • Civil war article exists, and I now added the link. Ruling Family article created. Thanks for the review!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 14:25, May 29, 2011 (UTC)
3. Imperators II
   • The TEA description of Pesfavri also mentions that the Way of Schesa was "one of the only hyperlanes leading into the Redoubt". I suggest you add that info. Also, the bit about the route leading into the Redoubt would help the phrase "the other terminal point" make more sense.
   • In ref[1] you should specify that the grid F-8 is also in the Unknown Regions (and that Pesfavri is in the Unknown Regions, too).
   • You'll have to source the "Unknown Regions" in the first sentence to ref[1].
   • Imho, "planets owned" should be changed to "home planets", since this would be more accurate.
   • In the BTS section, why source with ref[2] only the second sentence when you could source both the second and third sentence? Imperators II^(Talk) 00:10, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
     • Done. Thanks!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 08:31, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
     • Fully completed.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 12:34, June 9, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• You might consider pointing ref[1] to p.145 instead of p.4, as the map there shows much more clearly and distinctly that the Redoubt is located in the Unknown Regions. As you can see, this is not an objection, however. Imperators II^(Talk) 00:10, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
  • Yes. The map there is indeed of a higher quality. Thanks!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 08:31, June 5, 2011 (UTC)