Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Saddlebull

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Saddlebull

• Nominated by: BloodOfIrizi (talk) 18:25, 9 December 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: i know theres something wrong with this article but i cannot for the life of me figure out what it is, so, yeet.
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:Chiss WP:Novels

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Support

1. Fan26 (Talk) 21:38, 21 December 2022 (UTC)
2. Samonic ^(Talk) 16:26, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
3. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 01:54, 27 December 2022 (UTC)
4. —spookywilloww^talk 04:38, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
5. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:14, 30 December 2022 (UTC)

Object

Fan

• I think that expression could be used in a quote Fan26 (Talk) 04:55, 15 December 2022 (UTC)
• The majority of the first paragraph is the second sentence, please break it up so 'tis no longer a run-on Fan26 (Talk) 04:56, 15 December 2022 (UTC)
  • addressed BloodOfIrizi (talk) 16:22, 15 December 2022 (UTC)
    • If Ziinda is still affiliated with the Xodlak at this point and therefore still known by the name Lakinda, wouldn't it make more sense to refer to her only by the name and core name she had at the time? Currently introducing her with her later name and core name adds unnecessary info IMO Fan26 (Talk) 00:03, 17 December 2022 (UTC)
      • good point, changed BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:30, 17 December 2022 (UTC)
        • ThanksFan26 (Talk) 21:37, 21 December 2022 (UTC)

Samonic

• You should mention that the Xodlak = Lakinda's family when you say "her family" to avoid confusion. Saying that the senior captain had led the "Xodlak" without specifying what that is may confuse our readers.
• "where the senior captain had led the Xodlak to take control of the planet Hoxim." — She attempted to claim the world, no one took control of Hoxim.
• "Entire operation" — Are you referring to the Hoxim incident or the Agbui attempt to precipitate a Chiss Ascendancy civil war? I wouldn't consider the Hoxim incident an operation. I'd suggest rewording to something like "The Chiss believed the planet featured deposits of the nyix metal, which was false."
• I think you should specify Lakinda did join the Irizi. Samonic ^(Talk) 13:35, 17 December 2022 (UTC)
  • done BloodOfIrizi (talk) 16:37, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• I don't think the last sentence is really relevant to the saddlebull. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 19:23, 25 December 2022 (UTC)
  • removed BloodOfIrizi (talk) 20:00, 25 December 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• i wouldnt say the old man in the quote is notable for a page BloodOfIrizi (talk) 16:23, 15 December 2022 (UTC)
  • scratch that, deemed notable. page created + linked BloodOfIrizi (talk) 16:37, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 09:14, 30 December 2022 (UTC)