Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Rees Alrix

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Rees Alrix

  • Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:58, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Yoda: Dark Rendezvous Jedi Part 3 (of 4)

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:29, June 18, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ECvote—Axinal Convocation Chamber 19:12, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Teff 15:41, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ECvote ~SavageBOB sig 16:17, June 24, 2011 (UTC)

Object

  1. Exiled Jedi
    • You should mention directly that she was a member of the Jedi Order. (I know that this is rather picky, but I have seen other people bring similar things up.)
      • No problem, you're correct. Added.
    • You seem to have a problem with your first reference, it links to the encyclopedia not Dark Rendezvous.
      • Fixed.
    • I would change the mentioned only tag for Dark Rendezvous to "first mentioned".
      • Done.
    • Other than that the article is very good.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:16, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Axinal
    • "While a Knight, the Clone Wars broke out across the galaxy [...]" This is a dangling participle, and currently implies that the Clone Wars was a Knight. Could you possibly rephrase the sentence, or at least the first phrase, to clarify that Alrix was the Knight?
      • Done.
    • I haven't read Dark Rendezvous, so I'm not sure on the context, but he opening quote implies that Leem took multiple apprentices, with Alrix being the first. Could this information be integrated into the body somewhere?
      • I fail to see why this should be interesting for Alrix's article that she was the first/second/third Padawan.
        • I thought it might be a nice addition, but I suppose it's not necessary.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 19:12, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
    • Nice work.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 16:55, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
    • Sorry, just noticed something minor; A requirement for becoming a Jedi Master is successfully bringing a Padawan through the Trials of Knighthood. Because Alrix was Leem's first student, it stands to reason that Leem was not a Jedi Master when she selected Alrix, contrary to what the article currently states.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 19:25, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
    • Also, as I mentioned in the Eremin Tarn article, the affiliation field in the infobox should be reorganized to reflect the hierarchy of the Republic and the subsidiary Jedi Order.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 19:27, June 19, 2011 (UTC)

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