Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Phalanx Route

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Phalanx Route

• Nominated by: —TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 09:46, May 22, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Here you are, SavageBob :).

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)

Support

1. —Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 17:50, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
2. Solid work, TK. Others may find there to be too many M-dashes, but I wanted to break up the very long sentences a bit. It may be better to break them up further if folks don't like the dashiness. ~Savage 19:27, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
3. OK, nice work, TK! Imperators II^(Talk) 18:41, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • Thanks :) !—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 18:45, May 27, 2011 (UTC)
4. Good work.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:40, June 9, 2011 (UTC)

Object

1. Could we just get some context on Cormit and Telupe? I believe that's all I have. Cool article, TK!—Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 02:33, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
   • If there's any precedent consensus and authors' comment regarding this issue—systems that share their name with a planet have that world located within them—, then I am willing to add it. However, if there's no such thing, then it would be speculation. Also, there's an ongoing discussion about this in the SH.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 09:17, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
     • So basically what you're saying is that, although TEA says "Prominent planets in Chiss Space include:", then gives a list of the planets and then a map showing their locations, connecting the dots on the map with the descriptions of the planets is speculation. IMHO, that goes completely against common sense. Just a thought. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:07, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
       • Realistic fanwankery facts added.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 17:09, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
2. Imperators II
   • I don't think you should pipelink the Catlia and Tenupe systems, because you don't identify them as such in the first sentence. And why pipelink them in the infobox?
   • The fact that the route began in the Ascendancy's core territory should be added.
   • I think the route's location in the Unknown Regions and the Wild Space should be mentioned earlier in the article.
   • I'm not sure if it's really necessary to reference the fact that the route appeared in TEA, but referencing it to page 222 doesn't make any sense at all. I suggest you remove the references 1.09 and 1.10 in the Bts section. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:07, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
     • Excess refs removed.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 17:09, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
   • To be precise, "Chiss Expansionary Defense Force staging planet" has to be sourced to p.221, "jungle world" to p.223, "Chiss" to p.221 and p.223 (because the map doesn't give info about the planets' affiliation), and "star systems" to Appendix (p.229, p.235) (because, imho, the map refers to the planets, not systems). Imperators II^(Talk) 21:15, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
     • Done. Thanks for the advice!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 11:14, May 25, 2011 (UTC)

1. Bob
   • Yay, another hyperlane! :) Can you specify how the junction works out with the Vagaari Corridor? It looks like a T-junction, which I think is important to note, since the two routes meeting at Catlia seems to mark the terminus for the Phalanx Route. ~Savage 17:03, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
     • Done. Thanks to all for the reviews and diligence!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 17:09, May 23, 2011 (UTC)

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