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Nightsister armor

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Support

  1. ECvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:08, 26 July 2021 (UTC)
  2. ECvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:59, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
  3. LucaRoR (Talk) 20:09, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
  4. Dentface (talk) 05:14, 9 August 2021 (UTC)
  5. Liverpool92Ackbar HS 14:53, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Imperators II(Talk) 16:01, 21 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

Pasta armor
  • Noting (Concept art) in sources is unnecessary and should be removed.
  • "was known to wear such a set of armor" — you should either note who it was known by or just say that she wore it and not mention "known to."
  • The last sentences of the second and third bts paragraphs are both pure speculation.
  • Please spell out what MMORPG stands for; acronyms are discouraged in formal writing.
  • Bodily protection and personal armor are infobox-exclusive.
  • "Nightsister armor had been adapted to accommodate the upper body build of females" — Battle For Endor doesn't say this, it seems a bit speculatory to me.
  • Spaces in filenames should be replaced with underscores (e.g. [[File:Luke_Skywalker.png]] instead of [[File:Luke Skywalker.png]]) JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 23:11, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Body is 91 words, sectioning should be removed.
  • What did Whitlatch reuse? Johnston's art or just the design in general?
  • Missing {{Mediacat}}. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 23:41, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Did you personally check all of the sources currently listed? And have you checked everything here? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 03:17, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
CC-8
  • Please use NOTOC
  • Is "allowing greater ease of movement" something that's explicitly stated or shown in Battle for Endor?
  • The first Bts sentence should say something like "The design of Charal's armor,"
  • Better to write out a year fully rather than pipelinking it. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:48, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
  • As far as I know Charal being a nightsister cannot be sourced to Battle for Endor, and neither can the timeline placement.
  • The full name used for the article shouldn't be bolded, since it's a conjectural title. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 06:13, 23 July 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • If the name is conjectural, then it should be presented as such in the body. e.g. "The Nightsisters wore a type of armor etc."
  • There is no 1stID in the article.
  • You currently have two different references to The Illustrated Star Wars Universe. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 16:57, 23 July 2021 (UTC)
  • BTS should start with first appearance before discussing other details. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:16, 23 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Please format the Galaxies reference into something akin to this. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:25, 23 July 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • I'm to understand that Charal practiced shapeshifting into an animal form. What happened to her set of armor while she was doing that?
    • In that case, you should also note Charal's ultimate fate, since it is my understanding that she got permanently transformed in such a manner, which means...some kind of quasi-destruction for her set of armor. Imperators II(Talk) 10:09, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Fixed. AmazinglyCool CIS roundel (talk) 09:59, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
        • Please provide a date for that. You should also specify the reason for the permanent transformation, i.e., the destruction of the talisman. Imperators II(Talk) 10:41, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
          • Added. AmazinglyCool CIS roundel (talk) 00:51, 10 August 2021 (UTC)
            • If it's specifically 3.5 ABY, then that should be reflected in the body, as well. And please be mindful of referencing stuff other than the date to the dating note. Imperators II(Talk) 10:10, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Is the second paragraph of BTS supposed to be in contrast to how the armor was depicted as segmented by other sources? If so, can you make this clearer in the wording of the BTS? Imperators II(Talk) 21:11, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Please fill out the owners, locations, and material fields of the infobox. Imperators II(Talk) 10:10, 13 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 16:01, 21 August 2021 (UTC)