Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/New Codia

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New Codia

Nominated by: Lewisr (talk) 04:01, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
Nomination comments: First time doing this. Go easy please :P

(4 ECs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

Looking forward to your next 276,000 nominations. :P Imperators II^(Talk) 17:34, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
Welcome to the CAN Lewis! Fan26 (Talk) 18:30, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
Congrats on your first nom!--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 19:38, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
New Codia City, located on the planet New Codia in the New Codia system. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 21:28, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
Good to see new people on the nomination pages. Zed42 (talk) 21:40, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
Glad to see you on CAN! Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:23, October 9, 2019 (UTC)
QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 08:44, October 10, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Just when you think you've seen everything

~~The article on Ahsoka's trial has a conjectural name, so the reference should be reworded.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 15:22, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- How's that? --Lewisr (talk) 16:14, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
  - That works. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
~~I would like to see the fact that New Codia shared its name with Codia reflected in the article.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 15:22, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Can you move that to the very beginning? Imperators II^(Talk) 16:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
  - Moved. --Lewisr (talk) 17:04, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
~~It's not entirely clear to me why the whole Duja thing is in the article. Was the "Kuseph Jovi" thing made up by Amidala to not reveal the truth about Duja to the bartender?~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 15:22, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Yes exactly that. --Lewisr (talk) 15:36, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
  - Well, that should be clarified. In addition, currently the whole article is just one big, wall-ish paragraph. See what you can do about splitting it up. Imperators II^(Talk) 15:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
    - Clarified and split. --Lewisr (talk) 16:14, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
      - Actually, I think you can easily cut the part that deals with Duja's actions. Just say Amidala went to Batuu to meet her and that she died. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:49, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
        Like that? --Lewisr (talk) 17:04, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
~~"Just a city" seems a bit POV to me.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 15:22, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- That was what the book used 'Padmé agreed, wondering distantly whether New Codia was a system, a planet, or even just a city.' --Lewisr (talk) 15:36, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
  - So it's POV from Padmé's viewpoint. I'd just leave out the "just". Imperators II^(Talk) 15:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
    - Removed. --Lewisr (talk) 16:14, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
(Not an objection) Would be cool if you could get an audiofile for the quote. Maybe you can bother Tommy or someone else for assistance if you need it. Imperators II^(Talk) 15:22, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- I will ask Tommy or Anil when I next see them on IRC. --Lewisr (talk) 16:14, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
  - Added by Ayre --Lewisr (talk) 13:43, October 9, 2019 (UTC)
~~Context for Mokivj, please.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 15:23, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- How's that? --Lewisr (talk) 16:14, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
  - What I was really looking for was something like "planet Mokivj", nothing more. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
    - I guess the context is no longer required. --Lewisr (talk) 17:04, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
~~"Going on" seems a bit informal.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 16:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Changed, well removed due to above objection. --Lewisr (talk) 17:04, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
~~No contracted forms, please.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 16:47, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Fixed. --Lewisr (talk) 17:04, October 8, 2019 (UTC)

Fan

~~I'm not entirely clear what "distantly wondering" is supposed to mean, could you choose a different adverb?~~ Fan26 (Talk) 16:03, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- The book used "wondering distantly" which I changed around, but I removed the distantly bit. --Lewisr (talk) 16:15, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
"Following this, Amidala visited a cantina where she told the bartender, Janott, to hide her true reason for being on Batuu, that she was supposed to be meeting a man named Kuseph Jovi to give him his new ship, and that she wasn't sure why he had picked a spot like Batuu for the transfer point." This is a run-on. Fan26 (Talk) 16:53, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Any better? --Lewisr (talk) 17:10, October 8, 2019 (UTC)

Ruiz

~~Could you mention that the cantina was located in Black Spire Outpost?~~--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 19:29, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Added Black Spire --Lewisr (talk) 19:35, October 8, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 08:44, October 10, 2019 (UTC)