- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Murray
- Nominated by: DFaceG (talk) 16:17, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I tried doing an FA article for Kazuda Xiono in the past, so while I work to improve that article before I nominate it again, I thought I would try my hand at a smaller article like this one.
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Support
- Great job, Joker has ruined the name Murray for me. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 23:36, 8 May 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat93 
(talk) 12:35, 26 May 2021 (UTC)- Good work OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 16:06, 27 May 2021 (UTC)
- Welcome to the CAN! JediMasterMacaroni
(Talk) 20:03, 28 May 2021 (UTC) - AmazinglyCool (talk) 00:36, 31 May 2021 (UTC)
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CC-8
- First of all, good job picking a smaller article, there's a lot of skill in writing articles that takes time and practice to build up.
This link needs to be included and use the proper citation template in sources.The Bts should detail that the clip Murray was in was released as promotional material and probably use that link as a citation, actually the whole article should use that as a reference rather than just the Detours linkWe've actually got articles for the two stormtroopers, Super Ace and Killer (stormtrooper), which can be verified in that link I posted, though I don't know if anything confirms which one is which.The article is heavily underlinked. There's two in the infobox that are missing from the body, along with Parent/Legends, Refresher/Legends, canon,The linked video in external links should use {{YouTube}}. I'm not 100% on its inclusion in the article because it's not from an official source, but there's no other way to get the video linked in the article so that's gonna need some further discussion.- YouTube link properly sourced. DFaceG (talk) 15:06, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
- Removed as it's hosted on a fan channel. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:09, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
The YouTube link was present as it's the only existing source with the video that functions properly (the official source we have archived requires Flash, which was shut down last year). Out of curiosity, are things fine as is without a functioning example of the video? DFaceG (talk) 19:51, 6 May 2021 (UTC)- Never mind, I've been informed by Imperators that the sources section suffices as-is. DFaceG (talk) 20:00, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
- Removed as it's hosted on a fan channel. UberSoldat93
- YouTube link properly sourced. DFaceG (talk) 15:06, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
Should be in Category:Individuals of unspecified species.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:52, 6 May 2021 (UTC)- Good job: Round 2 -
I was too sleepy to realize it but according to a link on those stormtrooper pages Super Ace was the Donald Faison one who had to piss, so that can be reflected in your prose. Currently the wording of the Bts sounds like Starwars.com was a cancelled animated series, so please reword that.You should probably find a link for ref 2 that names the series, and unless you can find an official cancellation announcement that has all the details in that sentence you might need a separate reference for the cancellation.- In regards to ref 2, while I did not find a source explicitly naming the series, I did find one that should suffice. As for the cancellation, I have reworded it to be more accurate and sourced it. - DFaceG (talk) 08:01, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
- Yep that's fine. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:19, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
- In regards to ref 2, while I did not find a source explicitly naming the series, I did find one that should suffice. As for the cancellation, I have reworded it to be more accurate and sourced it. - DFaceG (talk) 08:01, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
You still have the Youtube video linked in the quote attribution.Should be in Category:Unidentified Galactic Empire personnel too. I may create subcategories for that later but that will be on me to change it.{{1stm}} should go in sources.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 00:50, 7 May 2021 (UTC)Last thing: Per the Layout Guide categories need to be arranged in alphabetical order.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:19, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
The audio clip has an extra bit not covered by the quote. Can you edit it out?UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:10, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
Context needed for Death Star, Super Ace and Killer.UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:51, 20 May 2021 (UTC)
- Death Star (while in my opinion the most likely case) is still ambiguous in the only existing clip that mentions Murray, so I could change that to "an unidentified vessel." As for Super Ace and Killer, they're known to be the Stormtroopers in the clip due to their respective voice actors. Should I include the source for their voice actors to confirm this? DFaceG (talk) 22:23, 20 May 2021 (UTC)
OOM
- (Review note; see here) There's no need to add Category:Non-canon Legends articles manually since the presence of the {{Noncanon}} template automatically lists the article in that category.
If possible, the year of the clip's release should be mentioned in the BTS.OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:02, 26 May 2021 (UTC)The article could use a category for the character's genderOOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:36, 26 May 2021 (UTC)
Comments
I'd like to briefly note I am aware of the fresh redlink on the page. I'll be creating the page within the next day or two. DFaceG (talk) 08:02, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 11:24, 31 May 2021 (UTC)