Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Mishru

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Mishru

  • Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 14:10, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Word count stands at 233. Let's hope this one doesn't go over 250 like the last two.

(1 ECs/0 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 19:44, February 19, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Fan
  • Sexes and Soldier can be linked to in the Bio.
  • I think there's enough room for an image, the Imperial emblem would probably work best for this article.
  • "After losing his own master he was forced to hide his brand" This feels like a little context is missing. Why does he have to hide his brand?
    • No reason is given in the book. But the brands show their faction so it could be assumed that they wanted to hide that maybe, but assuming wouldn't be the best course of action I don't think. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 14:57, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
      • An assumption would not be right, yes, but I think it's safe to provide the context that the brands indicate faction. Fan26 (Talk) 15:11, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • "...to join his band of soldiers who were ready to stop drifting from war to war" Again, it feels like a little bit of context is missing here. Does Twilight Company only say that Namir's little group wanted to stop drifting? Fan26 (Talk) 14:39, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • It says the individuals who joined wanted to stop drifting. I've changed it now. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 14:57, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • The intro can link to Death.
  • Additionally, the bio links to it twice, this should be remedied. Fan26 (Talk) 15:11, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • "After losing his own master" "who had fought for at least one", You can remove "own" and "had". Fan26 (Talk) 18:57, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
Spooky
  • "...help them defend their Crucival transmitter tower against..." - as Crucival transmitter tower is conjectural, I think making say something like 'their planet's transmitter tower', and linking to the latter two words, would be better.
    • 'their planet's' makes it sound like the Empire owns the place which they do not to I've just cut off Crucival from the sentence. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 17:45, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Crucival can be established to be in the Outer Rim.
  • I know this keeps hovering between the counts, but as of this moment, the bio alone is 161 and wouldn't need an intro. If this stuff pushes it over 165 again, and thus needs to keep it, I'll strike this.—spookywillowwtalk 17:20, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • The novel mentions that Hazram's band had been handed rifles by the Empire's troops in white, and that they all had used particle blasters in the battle; part of the reason Mishru and the others got cut down so fast. These would need to be documented in an Equipment section.—spookywillowwtalk 20:38, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • Added section. Word count at 245. And thanks for the audio quote. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 21:27, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
      • I don't think saying they were given blaster rifles was accurate. They were given rifles and particle blasters - two armaments; since blaster rifles refer to a particular kind of weapon, merging the two wouldn't be the best. I believe that section should also state that they were given those weapons by Imperial troops, which Mishru then used in the Battle of the Tower.—spookywillowwtalk 21:36, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
        • Done. Word count is literally on the limit now. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:08, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
          • The article still doesn't say the two weapons Mishru was given and used; it's precedent for the weapon types to be listed, and since we know them to specifically be rifles and particle blasters, they should be there. I know it's bordering the word count, but it's still necessary to list the weapon types, wherever that takes it.—spookywillowwtalk 22:12, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Particle blaster should have an article made, as a type of weapon; appears to have a Legends equivalent.
    • Created the article, don't know what the legends equivalent is called though. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 08:59, February 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • It is now over 250 words, there's still some tweaking to this that will likely tick it upwards; but technically, objecting to the current count.—spookywillowwtalk 23:00, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • You may as well fail this as a CAN. Unless you want to bring about any more improvements in the article while this is still a CAN? Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:49, February 20, 2020 (UTC)
      • I can’t think of much more at present. If you give your permission, I’ll take this down.—spookywillowwtalk 22:59, February 20, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
  • Based on what we have here, I think you should add the Imperial affiliation to the infobox and categories.
  • I don't think that image of the Imperial crest is really necessary here.
  • Does the novel have any other quotes that can be added to the other sections? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:50, February 20, 2020 (UTC)
    • No I looked up and down to find the first one. There's just nothing else that is indirectly to do with Mishru. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:22, February 20, 2020 (UTC)

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