Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified border officer

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Unidentified border officer

~~Article is exactly 165 words, not counting the BTS. As per Rule 12, it needs to be formatted with an introduction.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:38, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
- Reorganized. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 23:05, January 27, 2020 (UTC)

~~Please rewrite the first sentence to avoid beginning the article with "This."~~
Context is needed for Milvayne Authority, Aphra, and Milvayne (which can be linked earlier in the article.)
~~I think you can describe the officer's indifference to Aphra's bribe.~~
~~"He also wore a green helmet with a yellow visor…" Since all the other Milvayne Authority officers' helmets were white, I think this officer's is the same, just behind a green window.~~ Zed42 (talk) 20:12, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
Doctor Aphra 21 mentions the destruction of the Death Star. I think the Battle of Yavin would be a better reference point than Evazan's scuffle for the date note, and it would also allow you to use 0 ABY rather than 0 BBY. Zed42 (talk) 22:26, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
- All addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 23:05, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
  - Aphra and Triple-Zero now need context in the introduction. Zed42 (talk) 01:57, January 28, 2020 (UTC)
    - Done. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:29, January 28, 2020 (UTC)

Is there enough information for Milvayne's spaceport to have it's own article?
- Sorted. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:59, January 28, 2020 (UTC)
Also, you're now at 309 words (including BtS), so there is also that.—spookywilloww^talk 23:10, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
- That might be a problem, this will have to be a good article then. Will sort soon. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:59, January 28, 2020 (UTC)

You were waiting all this time just for an image, man… you could have just asked! ahah Winterz (talk) 22:31, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
- Heh heh. I would never have asked someone to add an image for me back when I made this article. I would have done these days but I forgot this even existed. Thanks for adding now anyways. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 23:05, January 27, 2020 (UTC)