Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Malastare Narrows

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Malastare Narrows

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Support

  1. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:25, 7 December 2021 (UTC)
  2. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:59, 10 December 2021 (UTC)
  3. LucaRoR CIS roundel (Talk) 17:54, 11 December 2021 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 04:56, 20 December 2021 (UTC)
  5. ECvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 16:31, 21 December 2021 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • Quote? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:54, 4 December 2021 (UTC)
  • This could use some splitting up. "Afterward, the matters were resolved by a task force[4] led by Jedi Master Kep-She,[5] whose forces destroyed the Harch's flagship, which led to presumptions that he had been killed along with his ship, including by Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker." UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:39, 20 December 2021 (UTC)
Manoof
  • You give context to the clone wars twice, describing it as the battle between the republic and CIS Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:29, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
  • You mention the blockade around malastare then jump straight to the malastare narrows engagements getting resolved. We need to give context to the narrows earlier if they are part of the engagements to break the blockade. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:29, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Both are done. Also, I did not jump straight to anything. There was a sentence right before it. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 14:51, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
      • Awesome much clearer thanks! :) Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:59, 10 December 2021 (UTC)
Luca
  • I would mention Anakin Skywalker in the body, maybe something like: "which led Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker to presume that he had been killed along with his ship." LucaRoR CIS roundel (Talk) 14:55, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
  • The link now needs to be removed from the quote per Manual of Style. LucaRoR CIS roundel (Talk) 09:01, 11 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Removed. Something as small as this can be done in a copy-edit. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 17:51, 11 December 2021 (UTC)
      • I am aware, but since you didn't remove it yourself, I wasn't sure if you were in the know of the MoS rule. LucaRoR CIS roundel (Talk) 17:54, 11 December 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 16:31, 21 December 2021 (UTC)