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Imzig
- Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:04, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
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UberSoldat93 
(talk) 03:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 09:05, 28 February 2022 (UTC)
- LucaRoR
(Talk) 09:30, 28 February 2022 (UTC) - JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 02:50, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
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Manoof
I think we can say some of M'Toc's attributes that are not typical for humans can be added as examples of attributes unique to the species, especially since they're noted as such in the infobox. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2022 (UTC)- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
- I think the hair colour/skin colour (including the blue mottling) can be added as well. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 07:06, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:42, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
- I think the hair colour/skin colour (including the blue mottling) can be added as well. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 07:06, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
There's some categories missing Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2022 (UTC)- Wow, can't believe I accidentally deleted it. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
Need to note that they were a monarchical society Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2022 (UTC)- We don't know they were. We know that the planet had the High King's Guard, and M'Toc served it. Who's to say that they didn't live in a part of the planet not governed by the monarchy, and M'Toc just moved to that area to serve the High King's Guard? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
Should "High King" get an article distinct from the other one? This would mean High King should be the disambig page. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2022 (UTC)- Well maybe they didn't serve a "High King," but theoretically they were an elite order of king's guard. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
The second part of the article should focus more on the species and less on M'Toc in the language. For example, the fact that he fled the coup should be rephrased to say that a bloody coup occurred and he escaped it. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2022 (UTC)- Done about the coup. I wasn't sure if you were also talking about him joining the Bespin Wing Guard, but the text was done that way on purpose to be smoother with reference tags. The CCG card and Insider article don't mention that Bespin's a planet, nor the context of the Imperial occupation, so that was the NEC tag. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
I think it can be split into two paragraphs, especially after the above reworks Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2022 (UTC)- So far seems like just 1 paragraph to me still. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
Would you be open to rephrasing "M'Toc worked as a member of the High King's Guard, before a bloody coup occurred and he fled his homeworld." to "A bloody coup occurred on Couronne and M'Toc, a member of the monarchical High King's Guard, fled the planet."? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 07:06, 27 February 2022 (UTC)- Done. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:42, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
Comments
- All other articles directly linked to Imzig and Couronne are status. FWIW, no source specifies plural of species, making me intentionally word the article in the way it's worded. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:06, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 02:50, 1 March 2022 (UTC)