Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Daakman Barrek's first Padawan (second nomination)

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Daakman Barrek's first Padawan

• Nominated by: Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 15:37, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Why delay, Jixtus said.
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Support

1. Last few things resolved via Discord. Nice work and welcome to CAN! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 16:25, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
2. —spookywilloww^talk 18:45, 6 March 2022 (UTC)
3. Take note of my final copy-edit for a grammar fix. I like the obscure topic though! JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 20:58, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
   • Thanks for the copy-edit. So do I, I'm looking forward to do more. —Unsigned comment by Samonic (talk • contribs)
4. UberSoldat93 (talk) 03:24, 10 March 2022 (UTC)
5. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:34, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Object

Luca

• I'd like to see a ref that explains how TNEC dates his death to 22 BBy rather than a double-ref.
• "…that Padawan to Knighthood and soon after achieved the rank of Jedi Master. However, the Knight…" was he a knight or a Padawan?
  • Errata corrige: I mean were they a Master or a Knight? LucaRoR ^(Talk) 16:00, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Knight, "after achieved the rank of Jedi Master..." refers to Daakman Barrek.
      • Resolved via Discord. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 16:25, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
• If they are only mentioned once, there is no need to say "first" in the BTS
• The articles should not be linked, a battle and not a battle.
• I'd like to see a source rather than ROTS to say that TCW was fought between the GR and the Separatists. The New Essential Chronology, for example. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:46, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Everything addressed. Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 16:03, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

Spooky

• "Their master, Barrek, successfully trained them to Knighthood, Barrek later took on a new Padawan, Sha'a Gi." Was this originally meant to have the comma between Knighthood and Barrek as a sentence split? It seems to read oddly to me, or perhaps if it's not to be split, a ; might work better.
• It might tie the article together better to mention that Barrek recieved the news of this Padawan's death while training Gi for context. Otherwise, the mention of Gi seems somewhat irrelevant to this Padawan, and more about Barrek himself.—spookywilloww^talk 00:04, 6 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Both done. Thank you. Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 09:31, 6 March 2022 (UTC)

Fan

• Gender/Legends can be linked to in an earlier pronoun.Fan26 (Talk) 00:56, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
• Oh and welcome to the CAN btw! Fan26 (Talk) 00:57, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Thank you, I've been looking forward to this. Samonic (Talk) 08:26, 7 March 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• This chunk of the last sentence is taken word-for-word from the source, please change it up a bit: "...and he committed himself fully to the war effort." JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 01:05, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Oh, is it? I wasn't aware. Changed a bit. Thanks for noticing. Samonic (Talk) 08:18, 7 March 2022 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Please include a rough publishing date like Oro Dassyne does. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:29, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Done, thanks. Samonic (Talk) 14:04, 9 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 07:17, 11 March 2022 (UTC)