Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Crystalstorm

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Crystalstorm

• Nominated by: Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 03:10, October 5, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. Fan26 (Talk) 15:47, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
2. Objections handled via Discord. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:23, October 10, 2020 (UTC)
3. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 13:36, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
4. LordMominutiae (talk) 21:08, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
5. TK-462 (talk) 22:37, October 12, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Freed fanboy

• (Reviewing note) Try to avoid the use of they. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 12:17, October 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • I have no idea what you mean. They isn't used a single time in the article. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 5:17, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
    • Oh. I see you fixed them. Well thank you. I will attempt to avoid using they in the future. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 5:18, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
      • I'd like to add here that the Manual of Style only forbids the usage of the plural pronoun "they" when referring to individuals of unspecified gender. Using it with a plural noun (such as crystalstorms) is fine. However, the second "they" that was removed (referring to the mining company) should have instead been the singular "it". Zed42 (talk) 05:34, October 7, 2020 (UTC)'
        • Well, this is supposed to be the most comprehensive it can be, so I think it was a good idea to specify that the Napayuni Mining Consortium is a mining company as Ben did. On the other hand, I believe the first they Ben changed is fine either way. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 6:17, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
          • Try and use more synonyms, pronouns can sometimes be confused with other things in the sentence or paragraph, or just look bland if used excessively. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 07:00, October 7, 2020 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• "...where the storms were known as environmental dangers." Can this be supported by the source?
  • I checked the source again and I don't know about the environmental part, but the source does indeed call them dangers. I have reworded it to better reflect that. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 15:52, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
    • Did the source say they were "known as...."? UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:03, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
      • I'll send you the screenshot on Discord. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 20:53, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
• "...which once bore witness to a particularly nasty crystalstorm." Please reword this so that it complies with WP:NPOV.
  • I have reworded it so that it better complies with that. I'm pretty sure what I wrote complies with it, but I'm not 100% sure. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 15:52, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
    • Is this wording used in the source? "what some called". UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:03, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
      • No. The source uses "The shard was recovered from a nasty crystalstorm." Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 20:53, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
• Please add the reference book's author. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:21, October 8, 2020 (UTC)
  • Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 15:52, October 8, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• Do you think these crystalstorms have anything to do with the salt storms in Star Wars: The Last Jedi – The Storms of Crait 1? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 12:17, October 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Perhaps they are but no source currently says that the two are linked. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 5:16, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
    • Understood. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 07:00, October 7, 2020 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 12:20, October 15, 2020 (UTC)