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Biofarm

(5 ECs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 17:13, January 25, 2020 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:13, January 26, 2020 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Zed42 (talk) 12:00, January 26, 2020 (UTC)
  4. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:19, January 26, 2020 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 17:41, January 26, 2020 (UTC)
  6. ECvote QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:42, January 27, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Zed
  • You should specify what the biofarm actually was. Given what's revealed in Doctor Aphra 25, I think it's fair to state that it was a scientific facility used for bioengineering, namely the creation of the pluripleq.
  • Thannt and Tatooine need context, and I'd say you could specify that Evazan was a mad scientist.
    • There's nothing to say about Thannt (it's never really been described) but I've sorted the other two. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:44, January 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm aware that the date note was taken from somewhere else, but it has several issues:
    • Overall grammar could be improved, "when the Empire was existing" is one example.
    • A lot of subjects mentioned in the reference can be linked.
    • "…between Star Wars 30, which takes place in around 0 ABY…" According to where?
    • The reference mentions the death of Davits Draven, the Assault on Mako-Ta, and Star Wars 50, but none of those are used to justify the placement of anything else.
    • "If the comic took place in 1 ABY…" Nothing in this reference note currently suggests that the comic needs to take place in 1 ABY, though. It could take place in 2 ABY, and Lona Aphra's death would still be sometime after 17 BBY. Additionally, what does "the comic" refer to? If it's Doctor Aphra 22, that issue has no direct connection to the death of Lona Aphra.
  • "…the bounty hunter Tam Posla learned about Evazan's infiltration of the biofarm and recounted it among the events he knew Evazan had been involved in on the 421st day of his hunt for the man." Currently, the wording of the sentence is vague in describing whether "his hunt" applies to Posla or Evazan. Zed42 (talk) 17:53, January 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure how necessary the context of Evazan's incident on Tatooine is to the biofarm. Perhaps you could move the date reference to the mention of his infiltration, rather than Posla learning about it. Zed42 (talk) 23:12, January 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • I think you could add a brief explanation of Evazan's motives behind stealing the pluripleq—so that he could avoid his many death sentences. Zed42 (talk) 19:16, January 25, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
  • I don't think the details in the last sentence are relevant to this article. Just saying that the trail had been cold for a month after that event should suffice, in my opinion. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:04, January 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • I don't think the comic explicitly says that the pluripleq was created in that biofarm. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 12:43, January 24, 2020 (UTC)
  • (Reviewing note) I've changed 0 ABY to 0 BBY, as technically, Evazan's infiltration could have taken place after the scuffle on Tatooine, but still before the Battle of Yavin. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 17:13, January 25, 2020 (UTC)
QGJ
Ayrehead
  • You should change "the pluripleq" to "at least one pluripleq" since the current wording makes it sound unique. Ayrehead02 (talk) 01:04, January 26, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 08:42, January 27, 2020 (UTC)