Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Band Light (second nomination)

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Band Light

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 23:55, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Second time through for #WP:VG

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 05:50, October 20, 2020 (UTC)
2. LordMominutiae (talk) 03:46, October 21, 2020 (UTC)
3. Winterz (talk) 02:42, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
4. Fan26 (Talk) 18:41, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
5. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 19:02, 1 November 2020 (UTC)

Object

Fan

• Unless the source indicates there are more crewmembers, since we only know four I'd prefer to see "at least 4", not "more than 4" in the infobox.
  • Done. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 12:17, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
• It should be "Unidentified captain", not just "Captain" in the commanders field of the infobox.
  • Sorry to interject here, but this is not true. With IU subjects, we don't use OOU terminology in infobox or article body. In this instance, I'd go with "A captain", however. Imperators II^(Talk) 07:05, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
    • Adjusted. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 12:17, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
• Word missing in the first sentence.
  • First sentence has been deleted. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 12:17, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
• " then sent a transmission about the incident which was intercepted" By whom?
  • Doesn't say; the wording is "Intercepted Transmission." Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 12:17, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
• The dating ref could be worded a little more formally. Fan26 (Talk) 02:10, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • How's that? Thanks for the review. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 12:17, October 13, 2020 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• With only 156 words in the main article body, the sectioning needs to be removed, per CAN Rule 12. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:07, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. To think it started out at 315 words... Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 12:17, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
    • Good work, now a paragraph break would be appreciated. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:19, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
      • Done, thank you. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 15:30, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
• After going through the article, I conclude that the second paragraph is wholly unnecessary as the information can be moved into the first. Introduce the crew members before talking about their deaths. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:49, October 16, 2020 (UTC)
  • Very well; done. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:28, October 16, 2020 (UTC)
    • Are the named individuals the only crewmembers or are there more? UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:28, October 18, 2020 (UTC)
      • It isn't made clear. I believe when Cal first wrote it, the assumption was made that there were more. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 13:24, October 18, 2020 (UTC)
        • Then it should be removed. Per precedent on ship articles, we only discuss the crewmembers that the source talks about. UberSoldat93 (talk)
          • OK, I made the adjustment. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 01:18, October 20, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 10:22, 2 November 2020 (UTC)