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Attack on Thelj
- Nominated by: Lewisr (talk) 03:09, 27 March 2024 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
- Date Archived: 23:43, 31 March 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 120 words (0 introduction, 84 body, 36 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 124 words (0 introduction, 88 body, 36 behind the scenes)
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Support
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:30, 27 March 2024 (UTC)- —spookywillowwtalk 05:21, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93
(talk) 09:40, 28 March 2024 (UTC) - - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 18:00, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- Booply (talk) 23:33, 31 March 2024 (UTC)
Object
DFaceG
Could "When she contacted Jedi Master Estala Maru who was stationed on Starlight Beacon, Jedi Knight Vernestra Rwoh was informed of the attack by Maru." to prevent the repeat usage of "Maru" in the same sentence? Perhaps something like "Jedi Knight Vernestra Rwoh was informed of the attack when she contacted Jedi Master Estala Maru, who was stationed on Starlight Beacon." (As an aside, the comma should go after "Jedi Master Estala Maru" regardless.) - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 05:43, 28 March 2024 (UTC)- I was trying to differentiate it so it wasn't just the same as attack at an outpost near Tiikae but changed Lewisr (talk) 06:44, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
Last sentence confuses me; did Maru not respond to Rwoh's question, or did he state that there were no reports? Regardless of which it is, can you rephrase it to make that more clear? - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 05:43, 28 March 2024 (UTC)- She asks him whether anyone had gone missing from several attacks at once, but he doesn't directly address whether anyone had gone missing from Thelj when he responds, he just talks about the other attacks/a seperate one on Dalna. I don't really know how to make it anymore clear Lewisr (talk) 06:44, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- Fair. If nothing else, can it be rephrased so the "anyone had gone missing from the attack" isn't more or less repeated after the comma in that sentence? It isn't word for word but it's close to the same verb/object composition (obv. they're the same in a literal sense but I mean wording-wise ofc). - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 15:12, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- She asks him whether anyone had gone missing from several attacks at once, but he doesn't directly address whether anyone had gone missing from Thelj when he responds, he just talks about the other attacks/a seperate one on Dalna. I don't really know how to make it anymore clear Lewisr (talk) 06:44, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 23:42, 31 March 2024 (UTC)