Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Atenna Olypo

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Atenna Olypo

• Nominated by: LucaRoR ^(Talk) 07:57, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)

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Support

1. Copy edit Dentface (talk) 16:52, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
2. UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:36, 1 August 2021 (UTC)
3. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:36, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
4. OOM 224 08:23, 6 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

Dent

• The article mentions that Tano was hired by Amidala as protection. Is that really accurate to the comic? Seems odd that a Jedi would be paid like a bodyguard. If she wasn't "hired" as I suspect, maybe reword it to something along the lines of "enlisted the help of..." Dentface (talk) 16:30, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
  • You're right. Fixed. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 16:39, 28 July 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• The quote attribution needs more context.
• The Star Wars Book does not provide any BBY dates, so you need to elaborate on the 21 BBY note further.
• You have a duplicate reference in the body.
• Per Layout Guide, the infobox image has to fit the infobox's width. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:42, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
  • All addressed aside from the one about "the quote attribution" because I don't understand what you mean… LucaRoR ^(Talk) 11:51, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
    • The speakers identified under the quote itself, "Padmé Amidala to Ahsoka Tano" in this case. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:08, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Ok, done. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:15, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
        • You've now introduced her there as a "criminal," which is not presented anywhere else in the article. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:56, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
          • What about now? I've added smugglers referring to the smuggling routes she's negotiated. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 09:41, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
            • If she's a confirmed criminal, the infobox type needs to be specified to reflect this. UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:28, 1 August 2021 (UTC)
              • Is this what you were looking for? LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:34, 1 August 2021 (UTC)
• Body can use a paragraph break. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:08, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
  • I've divided her "biography" from her physical description. I couldn't see other points to divide the article. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:15, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
    • There is an unsourced paragraph now. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:56, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Damn, fixed. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 09:41, 31 July 2021 (UTC)

Imp

• Please describe the rest of the subject's attire, not just the collar. In addition, the headdress also contains a red element. And please mention those things wrapped around her lekku, too.
  • Done. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:16, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
• I'd say that someone who "negotiates smuggling routes" isn't necessary themselves a smuggler or a criminal, so that should be reworded/clarified. Imperators II^(Talk) 18:28, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
  • In my opinion, someone that negotiates a smuggling route (which is illegal) is a criminal per definition. Cambridge dictionary states: Criminal = someone who commits a crime. Since smuggling (and helping to smuggle) is a crime, I'd say it needs no further elaboration. If you have something specific in mind, please tell me. Thanks! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:16, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Someone who negotiates a trading route, illegal or not, could just as simply be a diplomat conducting negotiations on behalf of someone else, for whatever reasons. That does not automatically make them a smuggler themselves, or even a criminal. Imperators II^(Talk) 19:20, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
      • The only thing that I could change is the infobox, yet I don't think it's factual incorrect. If a senator of the Republic considers someone a possible threat, it means the she isn't completely legal... Adding this to the fact that she negotiated those routes... I wouldn't know how to elaborate it further, I've explained what she's done and why Amidala feared her. If you want I can change the "type" of infobox, but I don't see the need. :P LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:25, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
        • The color of the infobox is not what bothers me, really. It's the category that explicitly tells the reader that the subject was a smuggler, plus the quote attribution, which implies that she is a criminal. Imperators II^(Talk) 19:53, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
          • Category removed and quote changed! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 20:07, 5 August 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• Since the article no longer states that she's a smuggler or criminal, the infobox should be adjusted accordingly. OOM 224 01:27, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 05:03, 6 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 08:23, 6 August 2021 (UTC)